The Official Writing Challenge
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05/09/05
Lovely - and I love the ending - well done and well written.
Powerful! This story tugged on my heart's strings! Great job!
05/09/05
Good job!
05/14/05
This is beautiful. Your descriptions of the people on the bus and the stop for the bus to be cleaned out etc en route were good too, although took up a lot of the valuable 750 words. Well done with a great entry.
05/15/05
Nice job! I agree that the descriptions were great and drew the reader into the story. Be careful to save room enough to develop the end as well as you developed the beginning; 750 words gets used up quickly! Good work! Blessings, Cheri