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Beautiful story! The characters come alive through both description and dialogue, and one can feel the pain of the main character's experience of discrimination.

Intriguing title, too--it sparked my curiosity right away.

Great job!
I would love to read the "rest" of this story. It's intriguing from start to finish. I hope there will be a sequel.

And I'm glad that in glory, men and women will walk together as they once did in Eden — no turf wars, no gender prejudice.

Well done.
I was completely engrossed in the story. You can feel the MC's frustration and confusion. I like the style writing and the piece is very polished. Excellent!
I like the Sam Spade voice and "detective novel" ambience you created here. Really, really enjoyed this.
Good writing and attention-holding. Wonder what happens next?
you grabbed and held my attention through the whole story. well done. just enough of each snippet to tell the story and hold the reader. well done.