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08/23/07
Some of this is very familiar — my father suffered from much of this same mental confusion so I could relate very well. Difficult times. One small problem — the husband started out as 55 and then was 62. Did I miss a time transition somewhere? Well done.
08/23/07
This was well done and is a good, encouraging article for those facing such a trauma. I, too, noticed the age difference. But other than that, this was a very good article.
08/23/07
You've captured well the heartache, exhaustion, and frustration when dealing with Alzheimer's disease. Your use of the AA steps is very effective in this story too. Well done!
08/24/07
This felt authentic - great descriptions especially, and character development.
08/24/07
You've got all the emotions in this story a couple would go through after receiving this diagnosis. I like the ending because I think without looking to God for help, this is a hopeless, desperate pronouncement on a marriage and a shared life.
08/25/07
Since you clearly showed confusion throughout this piece, it might be more effective to omit the word "confused" in some places. Great job with descriptions.
08/29/07
This is such a heart moving story and could easily be non-fiction. I thoroughly enjoyed your story. Just a suggestion on the ellipses being you have used them somewhat. A space goes before and after the dots. Using ellipses to end a sentence use four dots such as. . . . One is considered the period. Just food for thought.