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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Confused (08/16/07)

TITLE: Done.
By Sue Dent
08/17/07


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Confused.
He’d said he loved her.
Would never hurt her?
Love, honor and cherish,
that was his vow.
Liar!


One word.
He could barely think it.
Through bruised lips,
He could barely say it.
Do as I say not as I do.
Was that supposed to make
sense?
Was that supposed to make
this right?
Confused.

No! You have to give me
a reason that makes sense.
My baby’s dying
And you say there’s
Nothing you can do.”
Confused.

Forgive them?
How?
I never doubted
you before that night.
Never questioned you
before that night.
Forgive them?
Confused.

Unwanted cargo
A discarded life.
I know all the arguments
But do I really have a choice?
It wasn’t my fault.
How could its life not be miserable?
Confused.

Shed blood?
Mercy?
Saved by His grace.
Not possible.
Not enough blood.
Confused.

Eternity.
With Him?
A dream.
It has to be a dream.
To feel the power of his touch,
To grasp the lengths gone through
To get me here.
To understand it’s me He wants—
No.
If only I weren’t so confused.

Done.
A feeling of peace.
Done.
A prayer answered.
Done.
A place to belong.
Done
A child born.
Done
A promise fulfilled.
Done


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dub W08/24/07
Haunting, striking, the free verse element made this so strong, it evoked anger as I read, which means it was effective, and so illustrated the topic. Well done. First into the Puppy Pen.
Jacquelyn Horne08/24/07
I'm not quite sure what happened in this poem. But I like the style and the way you capitalized the word confused. And I certainly identified with the ending.
Marilyn Schnepp 08/25/07
For the first time in eons, this writer has convinced me that unrhymed poetry (called prose I believe) can make sense, be understood and appreciated. Thank you! I loved the spelling-out of Confused, the concept and the fact it made sense! Even the Title...well done!
Beth LaBuff 08/28/07
I like the acrostic in your entry. Your work is very thought-provoking.

Only He can make sense of our lives, and He DONE it all. :)
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/29/07
Marvelous interpretation for "confused."
Joanne Sher 08/29/07
Good stuff, peanut puppy! ;)
Your last stanza, especially, is extremely effective, and I also like the repetition and the flow of this.
Brenda Welc08/29/07
Very nicely done! Great writing.
Jan Ackerson 08/29/07
Simply outstanding. Wow.
Sara Harricharan 08/29/07
Okay...WOW! This is just amazing. I think you outdid yourself! ^_^ The flow, the emotion-the EMOTION. Really awesome. Excellent writing!
Kristen Hester08/29/07
Wow. Very powerful and thought provoking. You "done" good on this one.
George Parler 08/29/07
Very interesting and unique but most of all I liked it.

I read some words in other's comments that I don't have a clue as to what they mean. But if they mean good job, then ditto. :)