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Topic: Desire (01/17/05)

By george elerick


Delight yourself in the Lord, and He will give you the desires of your heart ~~ King David

A bullet sears through his war-torn green army coat and slowly makes its way through the cloth right into his heart. He slowly dropped to his knees as if in a slow motion film.
And his last words followed: “Where did my life go? I am not finished yet!” and with his own eulogy he fell to the ground, another dead man with lost desire.

There is a deep deep canyon where some men dwell. It is a place that cannot be journeyed, it is a place that cannot be found, however, it is a secluded spot in the heart of man that one can fall into. The population changes from day to day, there are days when the town is close to deserted, and then there are others when the amount is innumerable as the stars. More often than not though, the density is increased every hour. It is the city, the place, the heart where apathy lives.

He lost it. He just couldn't take it anymore, life was too hard, and the goal was too far. So, like any other man would do in the face of what seemed to be insurmountable odds, he gave up, he surrendered to the weaker man. And now he lives in that town of all too familiar surroundings.

She pursed her lips and a tear began to descend down her once rose-colored cheeks. They had been together for so long, for so long they had loved like the great lovers of the past. But, how could he just walk away and into the arms of another and still say he loves her. She couldn't understand it, and then the shadows crept in, slowly and elusively she slipped into the canyon, and the walls began to close in. She doesn't know the way back.

THEME: We are created in the image of God. We were all meant to be beings of desire, to desire Him, His throne, His heart and His kingdom. But, (you fill in the blank) something gets in the way; a loss of somekind, a stress of somekind, a curiosity of somekind. And the fires begin to dwindle, the passion slowly fades, and one morning we find ourselves deep within the caverns and caves of a place we thought we would never be. God wants to give life abundantly, satan wants to steal it and he will do so artfully with taking away your desire for anything, especially God (John 10:10).The way you get out is up, you trust, you fall into the abyss that is God and allow Him to pull you out. YOU choose to desire, YOU choose to live (beyond clocks, beyond borders, and beyond definitions). What are you going to do about it?? Get up, walk out with me. It is scary at first, but it can be done, it must be done, it will be done. His will be done.

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Deena Walls01/25/05
This is so true we live our lives desiring things that we should not and really in our heart of hearts dont want yet we go on.....Thank You especially for the "Theme "GODSPEEDdeena
Deborah Anderson01/28/05
Great message. Thank you so much for sharing. God bless you.
Dave Wagner01/30/05
The piece and explanation both are pretty vague. Also, the transition from paragraph to paragraph is a bit too stark - it needs to flow/segue a bit better.

Also, the changes in tense are grating as well. You shift from present to past and back again...I'd pick one and stay with it.

But I appreciate your attempt, thanks for posting.