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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Angry (08/02/07)

TITLE: In the Wake of a Whisper


The veil in heaven parted, and all were at a loss for words, for a whisper was heard, and a secret shattered the peaceful bliss of eternity. Until that time, no one was aware that perfection harbored a tiny seed, which would grow and find its way to the mind in a desperate display of vanity.

Exalted to the highest rank, beauty swirled with a covering of gems--robes of splendor, whose fiery facets of brilliance engendered a hidden ambition and gave it time to mature.
Then from flawlessness came desire marred, when vanity corrupted what perfection inspired, but that which he thought was sure would become his demise.

He had it all, except for the laud and adoration, and the elation he wanted to feel when worshipped and loved. Yet the Triune One, who created his will, was worthy alone of such praise, and the question of whether to kneel to another had never been raised in the hearts of heavenís realm.

But what began as a careless thought became a passionate quest in the heart of this being for what he could not have, though, in truth, he had want for nothing. An instrument of unparalleled song with a wingspan to cover the Ancient One; he, whose beauty could not be compared, dared to allow the dream.

So his thought grew to a whisper spread, with all aware that to follow him would mean they might have to choose between life and death. In the end, their rebellion revealed the fact that those created could never endure the fury of a Love so pure, but by then they found it was too late to turn back.

A line was drawn through the sands of time, bringing the hosts of heaven to battle array. Those who chose to believe a lie experienced Godís anger as it was displayed like lightning through eternityís trembling domain. No mortal wounds could be inflicted, but their fate, as they stood evicted from Grace, would be placed in the hands of the spotless Lamb who was slain.

Yet once again, the heavens will quake when His sudden appearance shakes the earth as the Son executes the wrath of Almighty God. This time He will come as the conquering King to defeat the one, who by whispering, sought to cover his jealousy and failed. Then Truth will prevail when the battle is won, and a song will spring from those redeemed, whose robes are washed in the blood.

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Verna Cole Mitchell 08/09/07
You have created an awesome description of Satan's fall, as well as a glorious promise of his everlasting defeat.
Joanne Sher 08/09/07
The descriptions are so, SO vivid. This is poetic in its language. Excellent.
Dara Sorensen08/09/07
Truly amazed at your ability to weave words together so seamlessly--that is a great talent you have been blessed with! Remarkable imagery, and a story of the ages...truly timeless and spectacular ^_^
Betty Castleberry08/10/07
I am sitting here without a clue what to write. My mere words cannot do this beautiful piece justice. 'Nuff said.
Donna Powers 08/13/07
This is so beautifully written. Every word is a pebble that adds up to an avalanche of beautiful prose. This is a wonderful description and the ending is reminder of God's wonderful promise.
Darlene Casino 08/13/07
I can see why you are at the Master's level! This is both a beautiful and terrible piece;to see a 'great one' in his fall, and imagine the hosts of heaven
dressed for battle. How well you told the story.
Seema Bagai 08/14/07
Beautifully written.
Jan Ackerson 08/15/07
I like the hush-edness of the first 6 paragraphs, contrasted with the loud victory in the final one. Very effective!
Kristen Hester08/15/07
This is beautifully written. You have me thinking about something I haven't spent a lot of time thinking about. Thank you for this.
Joy Faire Stewart08/15/07
Beautifully written with just the right flow. I love the command you have with words.
LaNaye Perkins08/15/07
I love the way this story flowed. You did an awesome job!
Loren T. Lowery08/15/07
The fall as seen through the eyes of a writer...what a wonderful, provoking read!
Dee Yoder 08/15/07
Oh, love the ending! I like the image of Satan whispering through Heaven of his calculated plan, trying to win over the others to his cause. His vanity obscures the defeat he is sure to discover from his Creator.
Brenda Welc08/15/07
Great writing and I loved the title. Very descriptive writing.
George Parler 08/15/07
What a unique and powerful POV. This is wonderful writing. Good job!
Patty Wysong08/15/07
Beautifully written with a beautiful flow. love it! Hugs!!
Janice Fitzpatrick08/15/07
This is so beautiful Mid. What an awesome contrast and a wonderful array of colors painted through your choice of words. I could really feel the presence of the Lord through this one hon. WOW! Nicely done.Hugs.
TJ Nickel08/16/07
good theology, kept sound while creative use of lit. tech. MC is devil, and he displays pride, vanity, and jealousy - the anger in the story appears to be God's. So much to take in...fantastic job.
Sara Harricharan 08/17/07
Gave me goosebumps reading this one. Excellent job, seeing things from a new POV and very vivid descriptions and feelings captured in the angels thrown out. ^_^