The Official Writing Challenge
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This was well written from the point of view of Jonah. It's just a pity about the shift from 1st to 3rd person halfway through. That was a little distracting! You have talent though, which can be seen in how you structured the piece. You also kept my attention throughout.
Very well written, and emotion packed, Jonah story. The switch from his thoughts to the narration was a bit confusing - if you had italicized his thoughts it might be easier to follow. The writing is superb, tho, the story grabbed and kept my full attention. :)
There is some very good writing here. I would have liked more descriptions. What was it like to be in the belly of a whale? What did it smell like?, etc. Give me more. I enjoyed this story, though. Thanks!