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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Angry (08/02/07)
The old man was too weak to hold the newspaper any longer. It dropped from his hand, pages fanning out onto the floor. He closed his eyes, and a series of images flashed through his mind.

“Get out of my way, nigga!” the young boy screamed as he struck the dark-skinned boy to the ground. He grinned as he saw the blood drip from the wide brown nose. The other boy just gazed up at him, eyes wide. No one came to help the hurt boy. He ran home, learning to hate white people.

“You cheated off of me!” the pre-teen boy challenged his classmate after school one day. The other boy protested, but his pleas turned on deaf ears. In a moment, the boy’s arm was twisted behind his back, his wrist sprained. He later told his mother that he’d done it while falling off of his bike.

“What do you mean you’re breaking up with me? You’re my girl! Get back in here right now!” the older teenager said to the beautiful blond girl as she walked out of his life forever.

“I don’t want your parents coming to the wedding. Since they’re too poor to pay for any of it, they’re not the sort of people we want to be associating with,” the young man told his tearful fiancée, who was too love-struck to argue.

“You slut! Get out of my house! And don’t expect any money from the divorce settlement, either!” the man, several years older, yelled at his wife, as she ran out the door into the arms of a gentler man.

“How could you get a C in math? Are you stupid? No child of mine would get such a low math grade. You’re not my daughter!” the man scolded his ten-year-old daughter, who then went to live permanently with her mother and stepfather.

“You’re marrying that bum? He doesn’t even have a savings account! What are you going to live on? How is he going to support the two of you? You won’t be able to crawl to me for help. If you marry that man, I will disinherit you. You will not get a cent from me or my estate,” the middle-aged man said to his twenty-three-year-old daughter two months before she married the man of her dreams and disappeared from her father’s life forever.

“These sales figures are way too low! You lazy bum! You’re fired!” the older man told his partner of twenty-nine years. His partner, overwhelmed and depressed, drove his car into a tree so that his wife and children could benefit from his life insurance policy.

“Ha! God? What has God ever done for me? No, sir, I’ve done everything my own way for my whole entire life, and I’ve no intention of stopping now. You can just take your Bible and your good wishes, and stick ‘em where the sun don’t shine, you idiot preacher!” The seventy-year-old man shouted as he slammed the door in the eager young minister’s face. The younger man walked away, sadly shaking his head.

Now the images stopped. A tear formed in the man’s eye as he realized how much he had lost over the years. He was alone, in darkness. But it was too late. He felt the breath flow out of his body.
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Christine Dunn
08/09/07
How sad. I suppose they say, 'contempt breeds contempt', which is what this story illustrates. You portrayed the gradual change in words and thought, from those spoken to the MC, to those of the MC very well.
Marilyn Schnepp 
08/11/07
Yes, the images of anger do linger on...and eventually catch up to you in old age when you're alone. How sad. Nicely written entry, and is very creative. Liked this very much.
Joy Faire Stewart
08/13/07
You have shown how sad and hurtful anger can be. Good job writing.
Joanne Sher 
08/15/07
Very creative take on the topic - and very compelling images. The last paragraph sure packs a whallop!
Jan Ackerson
08/15/07
Sad, sad, sad...and powerfully written.
Kristen Hester
08/15/07
This is heartbreaking...and beautifully written. Great job!
Dee Yoder
08/15/07
I have always been glad that a man who lived his life, like the one you described here, finally realizes his mistakes and turns his life over to the Lord before he dies. But your story illustrates the other side of that decision;he lives a terrible life while he's on earth! And the waves of destruction he leaves behind can't easily be stilled.
Brenda Buikema
08/15/07
I think you broke my heart! This was wonderfully done. Very descriptive and to the point. Keep writing His messages.
Seema Bagai 
08/17/07
Powerful story. It pulled me in and the narrative flowed smoothly. Well written.