The Official Writing Challenge
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Very well written. I couldn't help but be reminded of the 'Boo Radley' subplot in 'To Kill a Mockingbird' as I read this. I particularly liked Jake's change of heart.
I enjoyed this story and like the turn-around in attitude. You make an excellent point.
This was a fun read, and it too reminded me of 'To Kill a Mockingbird.' I love how at the end, the boys jump in to help without a mind to what Jake might say; that's great.

There's a part in the middle where it sounds as though you shift from first to third person; and I never really got a sense of who the MC was (could have been Carson, really).

Otherwise, though, great job. :-)
I thought the characterization, plot, and descriptions were excellent. The message was presented well with the boys' change of heart.
I'll bet there is going to be one less angry old man in town when the kids get finished (not to mention kids who think before they act). Nice work.
I liked your title link to the subject. I enjoyed reading your story.
I liked this story very much. Carson came through as a strong and exemplary character. I could visualise the scenes very well from your descriptive dialogue. Good work!
Good job!
I really liked this story. And it's not just because my new son is named CARSON!!! (Though that did help.) This has great writing and is a great story. Some people who seem angry, may be angry for a reason. The title is great also.
This also reminds me of Boo Radley. I like the way Carson doesn't back down when the boys don't want him to go to the house. I was a bit confused at first with the shift in POV, but it didn't keep me from enjoying the story!
Bonnie, you not only had a solid story here, but you made the characters come to life. I like the way you handled it.