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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Angry (08/02/07)

TITLE: Looking Back
By Beverly Jeanne Raffaele
08/02/07


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There was a time when I was a tender branch and your angry words made me cup my ears. They were like a rotted trees falling in the wilderness. Seemingly silent to others, but when they fell on me; they injured me, sounding out a crack and a groan that left an echo in the windy canyon of my tolerance.

Now, your cruel words are void in my mind. They are drifting like a thistle wish hoping to plant nearby. But the wind sends them afar where they finds others alike. Oh, they try to return and then they try again, like a stalker determined to have all control.But it cannot find me because I am not where I use to be. I am here now and you will never know where here really is. Why? Because I have hope and because of that your angry words have blown away, cleansing the air like a summer squall.


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Christine Dunn08/09/07
This was short and to the point. I love the way we get a true insight into the thoughts of the narrator. Your language is very poetic, and after reading it, I wondered if this piece would work well if it was rewritten as a poem. Keep writing!
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/09/07
I liked your word choices and your comparisons very much.
Lynda Schultz 08/10/07
Yes, I like the imagery here and a great message. Lots of potential. Keep at it.
Michelle Burkhardt08/10/07
I could hear the speaker's pain. I too think this would have worked as a poem.
Lisa Holloway08/10/07
You have a good message here, and I enjoyed reading it.
Gabrielle Morgan08/11/07
I liked very much your analogies in this story. I would like to read this reworked as a poem. Good work!