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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)

TITLE: The depth of my sadness
By T. F. Chezum
07/31/07


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The depth of my sadness

The master of deceit and lies
Entices me to my demise
He lures me with his skillful guise temptation drives me mad

With diffidence I take the bait
And fear a dark and clouded fate
This burdenís such a heavy weight and prods me like a gad

So as I feel my soul resign
The pleasures thought of as divine
Are now like drinking rancid wine I know my lifeís gone bad

A wave of guilt pounds down on me
As I drift on this endless sea
Alone I scream a silent plea where is the joy I had

And now I sit here in my pain
My tears are falling down like rain
The feelings Iíve come to disdain to my frustrations add

I pray Godís love is truly blind
And once again His grace Iíll find
The question running through my mind is do I make Him sad


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Verna Cole Mitchell 08/02/07
This is a very well constructed poem with excellent meaning.
Joanne Sher 08/03/07
The construction of this poem is wonderful, and the word pictures are so sharp. What a message too. Excellent.
Dee Yoder 08/04/07
Love, love, love that last line! It's a question we should all be asking about ourselves and our behaviour-how does it make God feel about us?
Jan Ackerson 08/05/07
Wonderful structure, beautiful words. I really like this one. You don't write a whole lot of poetry, do you? I could be wrong about that...but if this is a typical example of your poetry, you're very, very good.
william price08/05/07
I really, really like this. Another example of why I don not write poetry. Excellent. God bless.
Betty Castleberry08/05/07
This is very good. I like the unique format. The question at the end really makes me think.
George Parler 08/06/07
Very good rhythm, structure, and emotional depth. Great job.
Kristen Hester08/07/07
Do I make God sad? What a question. This is very convicting and powerful. Thank you!
Dara Sorensen08/08/07
I only wish I could write poetry like this! Great word usage and flow of the poem as well as a subject each of us can contemplate and take to heart. Wonderful!
Caitlynn Lowe08/08/07
A very well written poem! :)
Sara Harricharan 08/08/07
Hey, very nice! I like this. Good job.
Loren T. Lowery08/08/07
Can our saddness ever be greater than having made our Creator sad. Wonderful, thought-provoking poem.
LaNaye Perkins08/08/07
This is a well written poem with an excellent message. You did an awesome job with this!
Julie Arduini08/08/07
Wow, this is haunting and gorgeous---one of those that if I were a teacher, I'd make my students read this for how well this was crafted.
Linda Watson Owen08/08/07
I really like this for all the great reasons listed above! Super job!