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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)

TITLE: Domestic Related
By Mo
07/31/07


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Three friends meet again at their 25th high school reunion, but a fourth friend is absent...

KATE: Oh my gosh, look at you, you havenít changed a bit!

Kate hugs Dani and then Sammie.

DANI: I canít believe itís been 25 years.

SAMMIE: It seems like just yesterday -- but Iím glad it wasnít. (Laughs)

KATE: Can you believe Iím a Grandma?

DANI: You sure donít look like one, especially in that outfit.

KATE: (Standing proud) I know, Iím actually in the best shape of my life now.

SAMMIE: Good for you.

DANI: And Iím retired. Well, from my first two careers. Iím starting up a third -- as a freelance writer.

SAMMIE: Lucky dog. Iím still working three jobs.

DANI: You always were the over-achiever.

SAMMIE: Ha-ha. Say, speaking of over-achievers, what ever happened to Meg?

KATE: Didnít you hear?

DANI: It was awful.

SAMMIE: (Looking wary) What?

KATE: (Whispering) She was killed.

DANI: By her husband -- Louie.

SAMMIE: (Puts her hand to her mouth) No... the same Louie?

KATE: Yup. I knew he was no good.

DANI: We all did.

KATE: If only we had known the signsÖ

DANI: The signs were thereÖ

SAMMIE: Even 20 years ago. (Teary-eyed) But we were so young. How would we have known about stuff like that?

KATE: (Frowning) He sure didnít like us.

SAMMIE: We were single. He didnít want her to meet another guy -- a better guy.

DANI: He told her what to wear.

KATE: He told her not to hang out with us anymore -- or her other friends.

SAMMIE: He was way too controlling.

DANI: And too jealous.

KATE: Little by little, he chipped away at her self-esteem. He just beat her down emotionally, till she was too weak to leave, to even think of leaving.

SAMMIE: (Confused) How can that be?

DANI: I donít know, but the last time I saw her, she just wasnít herself. It was like she was half dead already.

KATE: And they moved away right after they got married. So he even distanced her from her family.

SAMMIE: (Sounding afraid, hesitant) He beat her?

DANI: (Nodding) I heard she had quite the medical file.

SAMMIE: How could someone not help her?

DANI: I'm sure the doctors asked her about all those Ďaccidents.í She mustíve covered up for him.

KATE: What a scary and sad way to live...

SAMMIE: But Louie mustíve been good to her once in a while, to make up for the abuse?

DANI: Yeah, just nice enough to keep her confused -- and still with him.

KATE: I never knew what she saw in him.

DANI: Me neither. And then one night he just totally lost it... (Shudders)

SAMMIE: But she was so smart.

KATE: And so funny.

DANI: She couldíve really been something; done something with her lifeÖ

SAMMIE: When did it happen?

KATE: Like 12 years ago.

SAMMIE: (Surprised) No way.

DANI: So long agoÖ

SAMMIE: She was so youngÖ Such a wasteÖ (Thoughtful) What happened to him?

KATE: He did time.

DANI: Yeah, but only like seven years or something.

KATE: Didnít he get out early for Ďgoodí behavior?

SAMMIE: (Shocked) No, thatís just too horrible. You mean he could be out there somewhere, ready to marry again?

DANI: (Gulps) Now thatís scary.

KATE: (Shivers) Totally creepy.

SAMMIE: Maybe we could still do something?

KATE: Like what?

SAMMIE: I dunno; something positive, in Megís memory, so that something good can come from her too short life.

DANI: Like a scholarship?

KATE: OrÖ a park?

SAMMIE: Yeah, something like that.

DANI: She studied philosophy in school.

KATE: Maybe a scholarship in her name, for a kid from this hick town whoís going on to Megís alma mater?

DANI: And she went to an all girlsí school, so the pool of applicants would be girls -- girls who may need to hear Megís story.

SAMMIE: That sounds perfect! Iíll set it up with the bank downtown and put in the first deposit.

DANI: Iíll write up something for the local paper; something that tells about Meg and mentions all the bank details.

KATE: And make sure to list some of the signs of domestic abuse. So maybe someone else will get help before itís too late.

SAMMIE: Yeah, that way maybe we could help even more people.

DANI: Consider it done.

SAMMIE: God, please bless this endeavor -- in memory of our dear friend Meg.

SAMMIE, DANI, KATE: (Heads bowed) Amen.


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Allison Egley 08/04/07
I love the format of a skit. I've done a couple skits for the challenge, and I know how hard it is to tell the full story, since so much of the word count it taken up with the character names and other details.

Try bolding the names next time, to make it a bit easier to follow.

Very creative, and I loved how good came from the tragic event in the ind.
Lynda Schultz 08/05/07
I glad these friends didn't just talk about, but did something about it! Good work.
Dee Yoder 08/05/07
Informative and sad. I really like this unique approach to the Challenge. I think this is the first one I've had a chance to read.
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/06/07
I like the way you showed the positive way the girls reacted to the sad life and death of their friend.
Bonnie Way08/08/07
Neat skit. Loved the emotions captured in the women's words/phrases. Great topic too.
Janice Fitzpatrick08/14/07
Oh, I like this. I love skits and drama pieces anyhow and the dilaogue on here flowed, making it easy to read. I liked how you worked this to build the characters and describe their dear friend, Meg. Great ending. Thank you also for reading and commenting on my piece for this genre, Don't Forget The Cross.I was completely and nicely suprised at receiving highly commended.Never imagined. Keep up the writing. I have reda other pieces from you and you are very gifted. God bless, Janice
Janice Fitzpatrick08/14/07
Hi, excuse the typos please. I meant dialogue and read but my fingers stumble sometimes. Again way to go!(Applauding)