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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)

TITLE: The Sympathy card
By Beverly Jeanne Raffaele
07/31/07


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The Sympathy Card

At the river bank a mallard paddles in the shallows. Willow branches draping gracefully over the rivers edge,
left a canopy where I rested my tense back and shoulders.

The scene was like a sympathy card from the paint- brush of God.

Then out of the river a rainbow trout leapt, the wind swept my hair and I turned my face into it. I stepped from under the tree as the rain began to fall.

The scene was beep, Mother I love you! Beep, Mother I love you!
beep beep beep beep_____________________________
Her family cried out…
Mother’s pallor was yellow, her eyes hollow but her countenance was alit in peace. Buttons switched off, tubes and needles pulled, then I gently washed her face and kissed her good bye.

A trout leapt, the wind swept, and I turned my face into it.

I stepped from under the tree as the rain began to fall.


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Joanne Sher 08/05/07
You have done an excellent job of helping me picture this scene, though I'm not sure I "got it" overall. Probably me. Great description.
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/06/07
Beautiful prose to represent a sympathy card from God through nature.
Dee Yoder 08/07/07
Good description of saying goodbye and finding peace.