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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)

TITLE: Betty Bee and the Long Tongue
By Patty Wysong
07/31/07


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Betty Bumble Bee settled onto a clover blossom and dropped her head onto her front legs. As she watched the honey bees scurry from flower to flower she became sadder and sadder. Oh, how she wanted to be like them: so slim and trim and so useful. Everyone loved the honey bees because they made honey. They could zip through tight spaces and always had such fun. Betty Bee wanted very much to be a honey bee instead of the bumble bee she was.

Josie Butterfly swooped in for a fast landing. “Hiya, Betty Bee. Why are you just laying here and not gathering pollen?”

“Because I’m sad.” Betty Bee turned her head away so she wouldn’t have to see a honey bee working on a nearby dandelion. “Besides, why should I worry about it when the honey bees are on the job? They can do a much better job of it than I can. I wish I were a honey bee instead of a big, bumbling, bumble bee!”

Josie slowly fanned her wings as she thought. “Betty Bee, don’t you know that honey bees are picky? They need nectar to make honey.”

Betty Bee stroked her antenna. “So?”

“So they won’t go to a flower that only has pollen and no nectar, which means that some flowers would never get pollinated if it weren’t for you bumble bees because bumble bees need both pollen and nectar to feed their babies.”

“They still make honey and look at them, they’re so cute.”

Josie shook her head. “There’s more to life than being cute.”

Betty Bee flicked a leg and sent an aphid flying off the clover blossom.

“Betty Bee, stick out your tongue,” Josie said, her middle legs propped on her abdomen.

“What? Are you crazy?” Betty Bee asked.

“Just stick out your tongue, Betty Bee.” Josie insisted.

Betty Bee rolled her eyes, but stuck it out. It was long!

“God gave you a special tongue so you could reach into flowers that honey bees can’t.” Josie thought that was so neat she did a loop-de-loop right over Betty Bee’s head.

Betty Bee stuck out her tongue again and studied it with her many eyes. “Yeah, I guess that is pretty special.” She said, sounding a little happier.

“It sure is!” Josie said as she settled back onto a nearby flower. “But there’s something else that’s special about you.

“Really?” Betty Bee asked.

“Really.” Josie replied. “When it’s too cold for honey bees, guess who’s out here pollinating flowers?”

Betty Bee hesitated and thought back to the last cold day they’d had. The only other bees she’d seen that day were fellow bumble bees. “Um, bumble bees?” she asked uncertainly.

Josie clapped her hands. “Right! You bumble bees don’t mind the cold but honey bees can’t stand it. If it weren’t for you bumble bees some flowers wouldn’t get pollinated and that would be really sad.”

Betty Bee stood up and bumbled about a little, buzzing in her happiness.

“Oh, and that reminds me of something really, really special about you, Betty Bee!” Josie danced around on her clover top. “You know how so many people like tomatoes?”

Betty Bee stood real still, listening closely. The family that lived nearby loved tomatoes, so this was really important to her. “Yeah?”

“Guess who needs to pollinate tomato blossoms so they grow the tomatoes?” Josie asked, so excited she fluttered above her flower.

As Betty Bee thought hard she buzzed… and buzzed some more. Soon her clover blossom was vibrating. “I don’t know, Josie. Who?”

Josie giggled. “Bumble bees do! God made them so they can buzz enough to get the tomato pollen to drop down to where it can be reached. Isn’t that wonderful?”

That made Betty Bee so excited she flew off her flower and did a double loop around Josie. “God made me special so I could do a special job!” she shouted to all the other bees, who stopped their gathering and cheered for her.

“I’m Betty Bumble Bee and I love being me!” she sang as she zoomed into a tomato blossom and began her happy buzzing. “Just don’t forget the ‘Bumble’ part,” she giggled, “that’s the most important part.”




“And He gave some as apostles, and some as prophets, and some as evangelists, and some as pastors and teachers, for the equipping of the saints for the work of service, to the building up of the body of Christ;” Eph 4:11-12 (NAS)


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Joanne Sher 08/02/07
Love the characterization. Kids will LOVE this! A sweet story with a wonderful lesson for everyone.
Dara Sorensen08/02/07
A cute story for everyone from kids to adults that shows that each one of us is special and made for a reason, even when we don't think that we are.
Jacqueline Zerres08/02/07
It was your title that got my attention. What a great application!
Caitlynn Lowe08/02/07
Such a cute story! I really enjoyed it. I'm glad that Betty Bumble Bee felt better in the end. :)
Donna Emery08/02/07
A sweet and special story that will appeal to kids and adults. Great job!
Dee Yoder 08/04/07
This is really cute for kids. I can just imagine the illustrations for this colorful story! I like the part about the butterfly resting her "middle" legs on her belly. Wouldn't that be fun to draw?
Jan Ackerson 08/05/07
Cute title, cute story.
Jan Ackerson 08/05/07
Wonderful--I loved the Clara Barton moment to the end, teaching us that there is always joy to be found...excellent writing.
Lynda Schultz 08/05/07
This is marvelous. I expect to see this published — the kids will love it (and the kid in me does too!!!!!)
william price08/05/07
Very cute and family friendly. Great for us old fogies as well as the kids. Super job. God bless.
Betty Castleberry08/05/07
First of all, I love your MC's name. :D
This is fun and well written. Would be nice to see it illustrated.
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/06/07
This is a delightful story with more about honeybees than I ever knew! I enjoyed it very much.
Catrina Bradley 08/06/07
Great children's story. Not only do you give an important lesson, kids (and adults) will also learn about bees and pollination! Fabulous.
Bonnie Way08/07/07
Really cute! I could just see some adorable illustrations to go with this... kids will definately love it!
Kristen Hester08/07/07
Great story. I'd love to see it with colorful illustrations!
Sara Harricharan 08/08/07
This would make a great children's story! I love Betty, and her friend Josie. What a fun read. I'm glad she discovered her uniqueness in the end.
Seema Bagai 08/08/07
Adorable story. I think the story stands fine as it is without the verse, but I can see why you added it. (Just my opinion.)
Kevin Rodgers08/08/07
You have a remarkable gift for writing children's stories. This is great! Well done!
Loren T. Lowery08/08/07
Can I say "Bee-utifully done
: ) Love the all the aliterations with the b's, too.
Julie Arduini08/08/07
This story has a great future in the children's market!