The Official Writing Challenge
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08/02/07
I enjoyed the imagery of this, though I was a bit confused at the ending. Was this a grandmother's daydream for her granddaughter or something that was really happening? Otherwise, the story was well written.^_^
08/04/07
Interesting, well done story. But the grandmother was never told of the child living elsewhere? Unclear there, but overall I like the concept of this.
08/05/07
I really like the characters and the story, but I also didn't quite understand the ending. Maybe the grandmother was sad because she WAS told about the little girl living with someone else? Anyway, the story captured me.
08/06/07
FROM THE AUTHOR:

I am sorry about the confusion and I guess I did not make it clear enough.

The grannie's heart was broken because her granddaughter was missing.
08/07/07
Good story. It was really easy to picture the little girl dashing about the mall. The last sentence is either unnecessary, or makes the story continue... does Abby ever go back to her grandmother?
08/23/07
Oh! Now that I read your explanation, I understand the last line. I do like the story and especially the description of the little girl.