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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)

TITLE: God's Sorrow
By Loren T. Lowery


Havilah stared at the large golden box that just been delivered to his home by twelve kinsmen. Encrusted on the outside were rare precious stones of diamonds, emeralds and rubies. It had been sealed with a lapis lazuli lock, and an opulent light burst through the small keyhole.

Turning to his sister, Gihon, he asked. “Do you think I can do this?”

She looked at the gold key hanging about his neck from an onyx necklace and touched it. “If God has asked you, then you can. You must.”

He moved to the window, peering out, eastward toward Eden. “Michael came to me last night with this key telling me expect the chest.” Drawing a deep breath, he continued. “He said it would be today… that they will be driven out.”

She joined him at the window. “I hear it was from disobedience.”

Havilah sighed. “Foolish to lose paradise over a single act of defiance.” He felt the key about his neck and glanced back at the gold chest resting on the table. “You’re right of course, if He asks you then you can…you must.”

“How will you know where to find this paradise?”

“It is over there, in Eden.” He gestured outward. “A garden like no other. It is said that there, the lion lies next to the lamb, fruit grows unblemished from vines and trees. There are orchards of pomegranates and pleasant fruits; camphire, with spikenard and large trees of cedar for timbers to make beams for the gates…”

“The gate at which you are to stand?”

“I believe so as the garden is to be walled off.” Havilah walked over to the gold chest.

“Will there be others with you?”

“I’m not sure. I think there is only one entry and Michael has told me that my flaming sword is to be used to guard against man ever entering again. I’m not sure if I can do it alone or if there will other cherubim with me.”

A tear came to Gihon’s eye. “Forever? How can man have angered God so greatly? Gingerly, she touched the golden chest. “This is it, isn’t it?” She whispered in awe. “The flaming sword.”

“It is.” He looked at his sister and wiped the tear from her cheek. “Why do you cry?”

She shrugged, glancing out the window. “I don’t know. I cry for what man has done, but I cry, too for man because of his weakness; and what he has lost.”

“You cry because part of God is in you as well.” He hugged her. “But then think how much deeper must God’s sorrow be.”

“Do you believe He will ever forgive man for his betrayal?”

“God loved man greatly, placed him in paradise, but I think it would take an even greater love for such a grace to ever happen.”

“Then there is hope?” A quick smile crossed her face.

“Yes, my dear sister. There is always hope.” He kissed her quickly on the cheek. “Now to the task at hand.” He removed the onyx necklace, and used the gold key to open the jeweled-encrusted chest. A brilliant white light filled the room as he removed and hefted the sword.

“Valiant watchman, obedient cherubim raise your sword,” Gihon said, proudly.

Havilah answered, “I don’t know if man can or will ever be redeemed, but I do know what God has asked me to do now and so I must, in submission, go and do it.”

“And what shall I and our other kinsmen do?” Gihon asked as she opened the door for him to leave.

“Watch for the light of this Sword in the east,” he answered. “And wait for the Word that the gate is no longer guarded, but open and then gather the others to come join me that we might all live in Paradise.”

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Joanne Sher 08/02/07
What an inventive perspective on the fall! I was engaged and intrigued from the first word to the last. You painted an amazing portrait here. Excellent.
Dara Sorensen08/03/07
Amazing perspective on man's fall! I loved every word of this captivating story. ^_^
Myrna Noyes08/03/07
What a very creative and well-written story! It was interesting looking at things from the perspective of the angel with the flaming sword! And who can really experience sorrow to its true depths but God? Good job! :)
Pamela Kliewer08/03/07
What a unique perspective the fall. I like this especially: “I don’t know. I cry for what man has done, but I cry, too for man because of his weakness; and what he has lost.”

“You cry because part of God is in you as well.” He hugged her. “But then think how much deeper must God’s sorrow be.”

God's sorrow... if only I would think of that before I fall into temptation.

Thank you for making me think today.

Well done.
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/03/07
This is a very creative topic, to be sure. I enjoyed the story.
Linda Watson Owen08/03/07
Fascinating approach to the familiar Eden story! Oh, yes, I love the line, 'You cry because a part of God is in you.' I was hooked from the first word. Great job!
Dee Yoder 08/03/07
Your story about how heaven was watching the fall of man is really unique. I never thought about what the other created beings were doing and thinking on that sorrowful day.
Phyllis Inniss08/04/07
Very creative.
Jan Ackerson 08/06/07
Catrina Bradley 08/07/07
Fascinating! Creative, imaginative, and well written.
Cathy Kane08/08/07
Awesome! Loved your creative approach. Really interesting perspective. You are definitely a masterful storyteller.
Sara Harricharan 08/09/07
A beautiful piece! You made this whole story come alive from a POV that I never thought of before. The descriptions of the jewels and the sword were just lovely. I liked the names and the interaction between the sister/brother. Good job. ^_^
Laurie Walker08/15/07
Wow. I mean seriously, wow! It goes to show even those who stand in the background have a story to tell. And what a way to tell it.