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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)

TITLE: It is Finished
By Benjamin Graber


Theyíve killed him.

Once I dared to hope He might be the Messiah, but every hope was nailed to the cross with him. Every hope perished when he gasped his final words.

ďIt is finished.Ē Indeed, it is all finished: every dream, every reason to live.

When the darkness came, one final hope was born; I hoped that maybe the end of the world had come. But even that hope faded when the sun rose again as usual the next day.

Today each second, each breath is filled with despair. Why is life given those in misery? What would I give for it all to be over? Iíve begged for an end to it all, but this morning all I got for my prayers is the most beautiful sunrise Iíve ever seen. It is as if the sun is laughing at my sorrow.

Now Iím on my way to his tomb, for one final chance to see his body. Iím not sure why I am voluntarily causing myself so much pain. I know I will break down once again at the sight of the body of the man we loved so much, but in my heart I know I have to do this just once more.

I only pray that somehow, in some way, the glory of the dawn will echo in my heart and cause hope to rise once more. Is this too much to ask?

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TJ Nickel08/02/07
Very good entry. Pithy. Love how you allude to the hopeful event yet kept the story where it needed to be and ended it prior to the discovery.
Marilyn Schnepp 08/03/07
"It is finished"...the debt has been paid. The only flaw that I might change would be to capitalize "Him"...as a deity in the last part of entry. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/03/07
You did a good job of telling a complete and wonderful story in a few words.
Lynda Schultz 08/05/07
Short, but oh so full of hope. (I guess that's because we know how the story ends!) Nice.
Joy Faire Stewart08/05/07
Very good entry with wonderful message because we know how it ends.
Dee Yoder 08/05/07
Taking the story right up to the moment when all of human history is changed is a great idea! Good narration and an interesting take on the topic.
Jan Ackerson 08/06/07
Excellent! More "voice-overs" like this could be combined for an Easter pageant, in the voices of different people involved in the story.
Sherrie Jackson08/06/07
I wrote a story about this once! :-o Definitely a weighty topic, thinking the Savior is gone and hope is lost. And I love the irony of us knowing what the MC is only about to find out, and knowing his sadness will be lifted.

I only wish it were longer. Oh well. Great job!
Catrina Bradley 08/07/07
Great story for the topic - that brief time when His disciples thought all hope was lost. Your writing exudes sadness.
Joanne Sher 08/08/07
I LOVE this! You so captured the sadness of the "between time." Glad you DIDN'T tell the rest of the story.
David (The Goliath Assassin)12/09/07
WOW! THis souinds like a testimony from Mary herself! Geeze... it's really emotional. And like the last one of yours I read, it's a whole different poem when you know the outcome! Glory be to God!