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08/02/07
The dialog, especially between the boy and his mother, was right on. I love the way you showed his emotions through his actions.
08/02/07
At first, I thought it was going to be something terrible that happened to his friend and his family to make them move, but then I was surprised by the twist ^_^ Great piece of mommy lit!
08/03/07
This little story about best pals could have gone either way, topic-wise; ...Happy or Sad; but neat story that finished up well.
08/03/07
You hooked me with the sadness of the little boy, and I was so happy to know he was going to lose his sadness. You did a great job with the story.
08/03/07
very readable writing here. Wonderful story of two little boys. You pictured it well.
08/04/07
I thought maybe something terrible had happened in the little friend's family. I was so relieved when it turned out to be a misunderstanding! A great story of friendship.
08/05/07
What's that saying about "big ears …?" I love your story and especially that last line.
08/06/07
Absolutely loved this. The dialog set the reader up for thinking the worst but left them pleasantly surprised. Good job!

Reminds me of and my first cousin. He and I were like two peas in a pod. Thanks for the smile.
08/06/07
Excellent descriptions, your reader can feel the emotion. Like the message, can't always believe what you hear. Great storytelling.
08/06/07
I was hoping there would be some twist at the end, and was happy when I was right. I think next time, the parents will be more careful about the words they choose. :)
08/07/07
I love a story that hooks my interest and then does an unexpected twist, and does it well. I like the way you took "sad" and made it "happy."
08/07/07
Very cute story with a good twist. You lost me with the last line, tho - I feel like I missed something. (?) Loved the interaction between mother and son and really enjoyed your entry.
08/07/07
Nice story and liked the connection with the baseball and glove throughout.
08/08/07
This is well written hon and evokes the sadness the little guy must have felt but what a relief that this story had some humor and a happy ending. I liked your last line- "Baseball glove? Keep up the great writing. God bless your day.:0)
08/08/07
At first I felt sorry for the little boy, but when I found out what was really going on, I chuckled. Really good dialogue and interaction between mother and son. This is a keeper.
08/08/07
Aww, nice to see it has a happy ending.
08/08/07
A wonderful and refreshing break from so many heart-wrenching stories this week. I have a softness in my heart for little boys, and this was precious.
08/08/07
Nice. Not bad. The happy ending was predictable, but it's nice to read something with a happier note.
08/08/07
Awesome writing. I loved this little tidbit of a story from a kids "tradgedy" of the thoughts of losing a friend. Nicely done!
08/08/07
Cute story - and a nice spin on the topic.

I noticed a few places where commas were missing (and some other punctuation problems), but nothing that took away from my enjoyment of the story. Thanks for sharing this!
08/08/07
You definitely captured the tragedy associated with a potential change in friendship, especially with baseball buddies. This was a nice change of pace, met the sad criteria.