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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Embarrassed (07/19/07)

TITLE: How to Dig Your ditch in One Easy Lesson
By David Butler
07/25/07


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“Come into the office for a minute, Jim.”

Jim’s heart sank. Tensions between him and his boss had become worse lately.
What had he done, or not done this time?

Craig came to the point.
“Sorry to have to say it, Jim, but you’ve become an embarrassment to the company. We’ll have to terminate your contract, effective immediately.”

Jim sat there stunned. Cold fear started clawing at his guts. No job to go to and a substantial mortgage still to pay off. He and Sarah had prayed the night before that things would improve at work. They both felt that the answer was just around the corner.

“But … Why? Can’t we talk these things through for once, instead of all these knee-jerk reactions?”

Craig had made up his mind. He was enjoying himself.

“We’ve talked about these issues many times, but you just won’t listen! I’ve had it with you hypocritical Christians! You don’t fit in with company culture. I’ve had complaints from employees who you’ve shamed into pulling down their girlie posters…”

Jim thought about all the female employees who thanked him for his stand, but said nothing. He knew it would be useless to argue with Craig on that.

“… not to mention your party pooping behaviour at the Christmas break-up. So what’s wrong with a little game of spin-the-bottle? We had that gorgeous Gina all tanked up .. but you HAD to put a stop to it, didn’t you?”

Yeah, and Gina thanked me for it later, came to church, got saved, and became the best secretary the GM ever had, thought Jim.

“….. You’re so full of your precious morality, you don’t care about profits at all! Don’t you realize that we’ve lost that huge Moreland & Jones contract? All because you just HAD to tell the truth about our stock shortfall!”

That was too much for Jim.
“But they appreciated our openness! They said so!”

“Now ain’t that just sooooo peachy!” sneered Craig.

He jumped to his feet, glaring down at his victim.

“Appreciation ain’t any good to nobody if you lose the biggest contract we ever tendered for, you bonehead! Enough of this ****! You’re fired! Get out!”

Jim collected his things in a daze. “All things work together for good…” The promise seemed a bit empty now. How would Sarah, darling Sarah, take this?
She’d say all the supportive stuff, … that he’d been sacked for taking a godly stand … persecuted for righteousness sake… bleeding inside, Bless her heart! But he couldn’t bring himself to be spiritual enough to rejoice about it – not yet anyhow.

………………..

“Come in, Craig, take a seat.” said the GM.

Craig wondered why the GM called him. He usually left things in his capable hands. Craig preferred to keep him in the dark anyway for various reasons. Well, he would soon learn about his firm handling of the errant Jim.

Mr. Masters seemed to be in a good mood.
“I’ll tell you the good news first: We won that tender with Moreland & Jones.”

Craig gaped. How could they have accepted Jim’s submission after having bungled it so bad?

“Yes, Craig, they rang me personally to congratulate us for having such a professional as Jim. ‘A man we can trust!’ the State Manager said, ‘We’d prefer to work through him than anyone else.’ They also liked Gina’s PowerPoint presentation I showed them. She’s amazing! We could do with more employees like those two. ”

OMG! thought Craig, turning pale. He had once nearly sacked her when she had repelled his advances. He had some fast thinking to do.

“Uh.. that’s a great pity, Mr Masters! Jim’s gone! He left for greener pastures. That’s OK. I’ll fill his post as liaison with …”

The GM was regarding him in an unnerving manner.

“That’s the fourth outstanding employee that’s left your department in a month. What’s going on, Craig?”

Craig, sweating, threw his arms wide. His private Jihad against Christians was coming back to bite him.
“Well, I guess they think we’re not good enough for them. Yeah! Ambition! You’ve still got me!”

“Really? The not-so-good news is that we have just had an audit done on the books. You have become an embarrassment to the firm, Craig. Get Jim back!”


Psalm 7:15 “He made a pit, and digged it, and is fallen into the ditch which he made.” (KJV)

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Julie Arduini07/26/07
I loved the line about the private jihad. This was a well told story, I was captivated by how it would end. The only minor thing I'd change was the line that started with OMG. That didn't ring true for an exec to say, but more like a teen. But that's my take, and it didn't take away from the excellence shown here.
Dee Yoder 07/26/07
Great story! Well written and true to life. Some do have to defend their faith in the workplace.
Virginia Gorg07/27/07
well done and followed nicely. :)
Rita Garcia07/28/07
What an awesome message! Love the way you shed light on a problem many Christians face. Mastercrafted!
Peter Stone07/29/07
Great story, reminds me of Mordecai and his attempt to destroy the Jews. In the end he was hung on his own gallows, much like Craig here. Starts off accusing someone else of being an embarrassment, but ends up receiving the same accusation himself. Also liked the portrayal of Christians in the work place. I have dealt with some of these exact issues myself.
Kristen Hester 07/31/07
Oh, this is so well written and a very captivating story. I enjoyed it. It may be very fleshly of me, but I had so much fun watching Craig "squirm" in his boss's office. I kind of wanted to see Jim get the good news and see his prayers answered, but I know with the word limit it may have been impossible. But I know he will. I'm not really a vindictive person, but I also wanted to see Craig fired. This was great!
Sharlyn Guthrie 07/31/07
Love the play on words with the title, and the entire story is extremely well-written. You kept my attention throughout.
Joanne Sher 07/31/07
Love the title - and the "turnabout" especially. Great characterization.
Myrna Noyes07/31/07
Wow! Does that Scripture verse ever describe your story in a nutshell! :) I enjoyed your piece from title to text and appreciate the lesson it contains! Excellent writing and great encouragement to us all to take the "high road" in all things!
Catrina Bradley 07/31/07
Something good to be embarrassed about. I love the thoughts of good results he had, and that he didn't boast of them. Very good entry.
Jan Ackerson 07/31/07
Perfect framework, with the title and the scripture. Loved the turning of the tables here.
dub W08/02/07
Pretty good story, I must say, some of the early dialogue left me confused, but the point came across. I think the POV shifts bothered me the most. Good overall effort though.
TJ Nickel08/02/07
First, congratulations! I like the title, verse, and a fitting story for them. Of concern for me was that the MC didn't have any flaws, he suffered in his perfection - and without him being allegorical, I lost compassion for him. Something to consider for later writings.
Janice Fitzpatrick08/02/07
Hi, This is awesome and Congrats on placing! Great job. I don't know if I liked your suspense build up through dialogue,etc more or just the plain fact that Craig got a taste of his own medicine in the end. Anyways KUDOS to you! God bless and keep up the writing. +-Janice
Angela M. Baker-Bridge 08/02/07
Congratulations on winning, and depicting an all too common work place problem.

I lived this story. My supervisor (VP) fired me, and and another Admin. My honesty led the company president and his wife, to realize he was having an affair with a staff member. I'd no idea, but he knew I wouldn't cover for him if I knew. The other Admin had to go to insure no one else would know.

He put me in major financial trouble. Two years later he was fired in disgrace.
Dee Yoder 08/02/07
Congratulations on your EC!
Dara Sorensen08/02/07
Amazing! ^_^
Sara Harricharan 08/02/07
Oh I like this! I think it's one of your best. I like that the 'bad guy' didn't get away after all. Jim did a great job, I was rooting for him all the way!
***Congrats on your EC!***
Myrna Noyes08/02/07
WOW, DAVID!! :D I want to add my CONGRATULATIONS on your 1st place win in Advanced and also on your 5th place EC!!!! You deserved them both with your excellent story! WAY TO GO!!!!!! :)
Sheri Gordon08/02/07
Congratulations on your EC. I loved the dialogue -- it made me laugh out loud at times. Good job with the topic.
Christine Dunn08/03/07
A well deserved win - The verse at the end (which I was unfamiliar with) really tied in with the story, and summed the whole situation up. Well done!
Benjamin Graber08/03/07
Wow, this is an excellent story! Congratulations on EC!


   
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