Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Tour About Read What's New Help Forums Join
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
E
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  

Four Ways For A Christian Writer To Win A Publishing Package HERE



The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge

BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN

INSTRUCTIONS

how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level

ENTRIES

submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners



Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.





TRUST JESUS TODAY

TRY THE TEST



Share
how it works   Submit

Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Embarrassed (07/19/07)

TITLE: Her Embarassing Smile
By
07/24/07


 LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE
 SEND A PRIVATE COMMENT
 ADD TO MY FAVORITES

Janet’s death came swiftly and without warning. She didn’t see it coming and didn’t have a clue it would come from someone she loved so much. She had been warned about a certain individual but the love she felt for this person swept all fears and warnings from her mind.

She was found in her apartment, lying on the bedroom floor, face down and all alone. There were two wine glasses on a tray near her bed, with one glass half full and the other empty. There were no signs of a struggle, only the bed sheets in disarray.

It was at the funeral when Detective Roy Whittaker saw something unusual and telling. It was an older woman sitting in the second row, with a gray veil covering her face. It has hard to make out her features but Roy thought he saw just a twinge of an embarrassing smile.

So strange was the smile that after the service he approached her and talked with her about the poor woman’s death…

He found out that her name was Wilma Stoker and she was a longtime friend of Janet. They had been friends for over 30 years, beginning in college. She talked quietly but with a kind of inner strength he’d not seen in a long time…

He wrote down her name, address and phone number and made plans to talk with her further the coming week.

It was on a Wednesday morning that he knocked on her door. She came to the door dressed in a business suit and wearing a huge smile. After talking with her he found out that she was an aggressive business woman and was to inherit a bunch of money from Janet.

Roy also found out that she was the last person to see Janet alive. He had talked with about 10 people and everyone seemed honest and above-board, holding back nothing.

But, it was when talking with Wilma that he thought he detected a kind of embarrassment when he asked about Janet’s insurance policy. She said that she didn’t know about any such policy but when she said it, her face turned a crimson red.

A day later, he found out from one of Wilma’s friends that she was preparing to leave the country and so he met her at the airport, with her ticket in hand and clutching a huge purse.

He asked, “Open your purse, Wilma. Let’s take a “look-see.”

Inside the purse was a cashier’s check for “50,000" dollars made out "Wilma Stoker."

Again, her face turned crimson red.

There was no doubt in Roy's mind; Wilma was the killer. Her embarrassment and her sins had finally found her out.


The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
Accept Jesus as Your Lord and Savior Right Now - CLICK HERE
JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.


This article has been read 568 times
Member Comments
Member Date
Dee Yoder 07/27/07
Interesting tale about the two friends! A little more detail to flesh the story out will make this detective entry more staisfying to the reader. A good set up.
Myrna Noyes07/27/07
I love detective stories, and this was a creative way to handle the topic this week! Wilma's blushing, embarrassed face exposed her deceit! Good job! :)
Kristen Hester07/31/07
I enjoy detective stories. This is good!