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07/26/07
I found this powerful! A piece to make us all examine our motives, our actions, and our integrity. Great job with the dialect, too!
07/29/07
I guess that accents are hard to express in print but, not being American, I couldnít place the one you were using here. Consequently it made reading the monologue more laborious than it needed to be. That said, I love the fact that it is an uncomfortable piece, one that points the figure at schools, nationalism and religion.
As always: brilliant, convicting and inspiring to be more like Jesus and less like me.
07/30/07
A bit hard to follow, but very, very powerful and thought-provoking on so many levels.
08/01/07
Neat! I like the conversational tone and the realistic 'spelling' it was a little hard to follow in some areas, but I think if you break it up into even smaller paragraphs it would read easier. Good job, I'm surprised this doesn't have more comments.
08/01/07
Love the dialog and the "creative spelling". I'm still puzzling over if you meant unBAREable conscience because he couldn't show it - the MC said he learnt to spell that good - or unBEARable cuz he couldn't stand it. Lots to think about in this eye-opening article. Very good writing!
This was very clever and creative. I was a little confused at times because the characters's spelling and "accent", but you stayed in character which was good. Nice job.
Wow! This is very powerful and well-written on all counts.
08/02/07
I agree, this is very thought-provoking. It makes me want to look at my life to see what I might be leaving in my wake. Good job on the language.
08/02/07
I jest luv this! : )
So much to think about and it is great to hear the truth for once. Great article.