Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Tour About Read What's New Help Forums Join
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
E
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  

Four Ways For A Christian Writer To Win A Publishing Package HERE



The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge

BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN

INSTRUCTIONS

how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level

ENTRIES

submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners



Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.





TRUST JESUS TODAY

TRY THE TEST



Share
how it works   Submit

Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Happy (07/12/07)

TITLE: HAPPY CAMPER!
By Lynda Lee Schab
07/19/07


 LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE
 SEND A PRIVATE COMMENT
 ADD TO MY FAVORITES

I wake this morning with a smile,
satin sheets pulled round my head.
But then it hits me like a rock
And my heart is filled with dread.

My forehead breaks out in a sweat
My stomach – it starts cramping…
No more satin sheets for me
Today we’re going camping!

Oh, I so don’t want to go.
I’d rather be at home
Instead of sardine-squished to death
Inside a canvas dome.

I hear my husband calling out
“Come on, hon! Let’s get cracking!
The great outdoors awaits us-
Let’s finish up the packing!”

The car is loaded up with junk
A tear slips down my face
As we head down the driveway
To escape the human race.

What will I do without my coffee
To start out every day?
No computer or TV
Or all-you-can-eat buffet.

Just the thought of all the bugs
Creeping outside that tent
Makes me beg my husband
To reconsider this event.

He pats me on the leg
and says it will be great
I swallow the lump stuck in my throat,
Sit back and await my fate.

My husband’s gently nudging me
I must have dozed a while.
“We’re here, sweetheart,” he says,
flashing me a brilliant smile.

I look outside my window
And confusion settles in.
There are no woods in sight at all-
Just a cozy, country inn.

“Do you really think I’d take you
camping for a week?
I know how you can’t stand the thought
Of bathing in a creek.

This week you will be pampered
And romance will prevail.
You can watch TV and take a bath
And even check email.”

I throw my arms around the man
I’ll love for my whole life.
He’s the one I always will adore-
I am blessed to be his wife!

Inside, I lounge on satin sheets,
My true idea of “pamper.”
I smile and snuggle up to my hubby.
I am NOW a happy camper!


The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
Accept Jesus as Your Lord and Savior Right Now - CLICK HERE
JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.


This article has been read 1638 times
Member Comments
Member Date
Janice Fitzpatrick07/19/07
Wow! This is soooooo good! I like the way you wrote this, humorous and with a suprise ending.I so can relate to this, though I will have to say I love the outdoors but would trade a tent any day for a cabin or cottage or even a nice camper,grin. Great job! Love it!:0)
Lori Othouse 07/19/07
Very funny! Sounds like a great relationship - the wife willing to "rough it" to make her husband happy and he surprising her in such a sweet way. Great!
Dee Yoder 07/19/07
Oh, so cute! This is my idea of camping, too. Great rhymeing and fun to read.
Rachel Rudd07/19/07
This is great! Your rhyme gives a fun "air" to the poetry. I will be going camping the day after tomorrow...so I know some of the dread. However, the great outdoors are calling!
Janice Cartwright07/19/07
I too am a nature lover but when it comes time to tuck between the sheets I want something other than canvas over my head. Just give me a decent night's sleep though and I'm good to go. Really great job and cute poem. You definitely connected!
Joanne Sher 07/19/07
What a fun piece! Is this autobiographical? ;) Love the meter of this - so FUN.
Lynda Schultz 07/19/07
I'm with you all the way! Good job.
Mo 07/19/07
Cute! Made me smile.
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/21/07
I really enjoyed this "fun" poem. What a great husband!
Bliss Gordon07/21/07
I love how God teaches us things through other people's experiences (or poems!). A really great poem with a God-lesson for me! Thank you for sharing! =)
LaNaye Perkins07/22/07
What a fun read! I loved the way you told your story in poetry.
Joyce Samuel07/22/07
Ooh! I don't mind a surprise like this! Not a bad poem. Keep it up.
Kristen Hester07/23/07
LOL! Amen, sister. You and I spell happiness the same way. I was thinking the whole time she was going to learn to appreciate nature, enjoy the beauty around her, blah blah blah. I like your ending much better!
Teri Wilson07/23/07
Very cute! And obviously written by someone after my own heart. Love, Teri
Joy Faire Stewart07/23/07
This was fun to read. Loved the twist at the end and I was feeling sorry for her!
Delores Baber07/23/07
Enjoyed every verse. It got me to thinking if this might be the way the great outdoorsman, Pat McManus's wife might would have shared her thoughts. Thanks for appreciating those of us who can only handle so much of nature before we long for the comforts of the inside.
Sharlyn Guthrie07/23/07
Love your title, especially considering how the scene ends! This poem is fun and heart-warming. Terrific!
Betty Castleberry07/25/07
What fun! It sounds like you like to camp about as much as I do. This was well done.
Jeanette Oestermyer 07/25/07
This is a cute poem. It reminds me of myself -- I am not a camper. I like all the comforts of home.

Do try to use more poetic devices. Great job and God Bless.
Sara Harricharan 07/25/07
I was smiling all the way through this! LOL. What a fun and enjoyable read. The ryhme was good and the story was better, you did good with the change of emotions and I like the line with "Happy Camper". Good job. ^_^
Catrina Bradley 07/25/07
Ooh, I love it! I started smiling at the twist, and my smile grew with each stanza. Wonderful poetry!
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/26/07
A well deserved win! The happiness continues with you!
Julie Arduini07/26/07
Congratulations Lynda! What fun this was, you make this look so easy to do. This was excellent.
Sara Harricharan 07/26/07
Congrats!
Marilee Alvey07/26/07
This was just precious! Almost every woman can relate to this. It's a dream come true, made even more wonderful when we think of the fate we escaped. Who says poems don't place well? Congratulations!
terri tiffany07/26/07
Hurray Linda!! Congrats on your win:)
Sheri Gordon07/26/07
Congratulations -- this is very cute.
Dee Yoder 07/26/07
Yay, Lynda! The non-campers are validated! Congratulations on your winning entry!
Loren T. Lowery07/26/07
Congratulations, this is a delightful read...nice to see (and refreshing) the husband displayed as an understanding kind of guy
Jacquelyn Horne07/26/07
Congrats on the win. I wasn't able to read many entries this week, but I'm glad I got to read this one. Good job!
Karri Compton07/26/07
Congratulations, roomie! I can so relate to this piece! You've done an excellent job. You never cease to amaze me.
God bless,
Karri
joe hodson07/26/07
Congrats! Great poem! Very entertaining!
Seema Bagai 07/26/07
Well-written. Congrats from a fellow non-camper.
Donna J. Shepherd09/02/07
Very funny, Lynda! And ends with a twist. Nice! Congrats on your 1st place. - Donna
Linda Roth10/05/07
This made me laugh out loud several times. I love it!