Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Tour About Read What's New Help Forums Join
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
E
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  

Win A Publishing Package HERE            

The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge

BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN

INSTRUCTIONS

how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level

ENTRIES

submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners



Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.





TRUST JESUS TODAY

TRY THE TEST



Share
how it works   Submit

Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Happy (07/12/07)

TITLE: As For Patrick Swayze
By Sally Hanan
07/19/07


 LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE
 SEND A PRIVATE COMMENT
 ADD TO MY FAVORITES

Iím trying to get happy,
help me in my quest.
Happiness class 101;
is there a beta test?

Iíve sweated, fasted, starved
to emaciate myself,
but Twiggy wasnít popular
and I looked like an elf.

Then I got a boob job,
my cleavage was divine,
but got some bad attention;
the jokes -- quite out of line.

Iíd heard big ďspendiesĒ shopping
was a panacea of sorts.
I bought a deadly pistol and
some very cheeky shorts.

I swanned by Patrick Swayze
in million dollar shoes,
sparkly things from Tiffanyís,
and body full of booze,

but bouncers saw through my plan Ė
they kicked me out the door;
so much for dirty dancing
with Patrick on the floor.

My personals werenít answered
by anyone worthwhile,
except for one delicious man
who turned out to be vile.

It seems at my age good men
are very hard to find,
even Jesus may come back
and Iíd be left behind.

Food, figure, boobs,
Botox, shopping, booze;
even Patrick Swayzeís hips
can't seem to enthuse.

Any more suggestions?
Things I havenít tried?
I'm searching for some happiness,
I will not be denied.

Iím kind of leftward leaning,
perhaps Iíve missed the light;
perchance Iíll find the answer
in a religious rite.

Iím off to highlight verses,
get some bigger hair
and as for Patrick Swayze,
Iím on my knees in prayerÖ


The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
Accept Jesus as Your Lord and Savior Right Now - CLICK HERE
JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.


This article has been read 932 times
Member Comments
Member Date
Janice Fitzpatrick07/19/07
HA!This tickled me right down to my funny bone. What a great way to show what really does and doesn't bring happiness. Love the last line and yes we should be praying every day for the "stars" for they may sparkle under the cameras but hide the pain and void they feel inside. Good job! Keep up the writing! Love it,Janice+-
Betty Castleberry07/19/07
Being a Patrick Swayze fan, the title caught my attention right away. There are many fun lines here. I enjoyed this very much.
Dee Yoder 07/20/07
Very funny! Many ways to find happiness, but nothing very lasting. Love the rhyming and the humor.
Joanne Sher 07/21/07
Bet you had fun writing this one! I sure did reading it - and what a message, eh? Good stuff.
Sara Harricharan 07/23/07
Wow! I wasn't sure where this was going, but by the time I got the last verse it all made sense. Good job, VERY creative! ^_^
Mishael Witty07/26/07
Wow! That's really all I can say. You did a great job of sending out an important message and adding a little humor to it.

One thing I didn't particularly like (although it was very clever): the line "even Jesus may come back, and I'd be left behind." Just to my way of thinking, this is no laughing matter, but I can see (sadly) where it might be to a lost soul. : (

Very well done. I enjoyed reading this.
Kristen Hester07/26/07
This is great. I loved the humor. Sadly, many people do try to find happiness through the things you list. I had lots of fun reading this. I hope it does well.