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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Happy (07/12/07)

TITLE: Hello Mother, Hello Father
By Allison Egley


Dear Mom and Dad,

Hi! It's me, Jamie. But you probably already knew that. I'll bet you're surprised to be getting a letter from me. But I found some time to write.
You wouldn't believe how much fun Iím having! They have everything I ever dreamed of up here. Baseball, swimming, hiking, and the food is good too. I talk to God every day. Sometimes more than once a day. It's so much easier to talk to Him here than it is at home.

I've made a lot of new friends. I hope you can meet them some day. I know you miss me, but try not to cry too much, ok? We'll be seeing each other before we know it.


Dear Mom and Dad,

It's me again. I'm still having tons of fun here. I'm so happy here. I miss you sometimes, but it's ok, because my Counselor helps me feel better. He reminds me that we'll see each other again soon. I'm sorry this is so short, but one of my new friends wants me to go fishing, so I need to wrap this up.


Dear Mom and Dad,

Have I told you yet how beautiful this place is? You're probably surprised to hear your rough-and -tumble boy say that, but it's true. It's so cool. You just can't believe it until you're here. Pictures could never do it justice. The tress are so tall, and they are right by the river. The river is so clear you can see the fish swimming around.

The animals come right up to you. It's like they aren't even afraid. Sometimes I'll feed them some of the food and they'll eat it right out of my hand. I've never been this close before, and it's really cool. I think "cool" sums this place up pretty well.


Dear Mom and Dad,

I don't even know how long I've been here, but I never get bored. It's like I find something new to do every day. Almost like everyday I'm here is the very first day. And there are a lot of people here too. I keep making new friends every day. My Counselor is great. He reminds me we'll see each other soon whenever I get that look in my eyes. It's almost like he knows what I'm thinking. Isn't that cool?

I know you miss me, but I'm so happy here. It's different here, and I can't quite explain it. I'll see you soon.

Love from Heaven,

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Lynda Lee Schab 07/19/07
Entertaining, sweet, very creative. It took me until the third letter to guess where Jamie was writing from. :-) Nicely done.
Joanne Sher 07/21/07
Very creative! I picked up on it in the second letter, but still enjoyed it! Enjoyed the descriptions - especially going back and reading it when I "got it."
Dee Yoder 07/21/07
Sweet and comforting story. I hope this is exactly how all the children in heaven are feeling! Good story.
LaNaye Perkins07/22/07
Very creative and comforting story. I really liked it.
Sara Harricharan 07/23/07
Love the title of this! The last entry is my fave, this was so well done I could see it continuing on for several more pages. ^_^ My only note is a typo, I think you meant "Trees" instead it came out "Tress" correct? Good job though! ^_^
Delores Baber07/23/07
What a precious story. It made me wonder what letters from my husband might be like if our loved ones could send us mail. How it makes my heart yearn for home.
Well done. It was a blessing to read. It stirs the imagination of our images of eternity. Maranatha!
Dixie Phillips07/23/07
Loved your creativity! It truly exemplifies the theme. Wonderful!
Sherrie Jackson07/23/07
Oh man, you got me at the end! I still have chills. Of course I had to go and read through it again. The voicing is just right, and all the little hints are perfect - they fit in for people like me who don't catch on till the end :-P, and they amplify the story on the second read through. Excellent job! Good luck!
Kristi Sands07/24/07
Excellent job of writing with a kid's tone of voice... and, of course, I like the ending too. Very creative idea!
Catrina Bradley 07/24/07
Very cool! I can't wait to join him!
Joy Faire Stewart07/25/07
This is so sweet and you have captured the child's voice perfectly. Congratulations on your first entry in Masters...excellent job.