The Official Writing Challenge
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But OF COURSE, caffeine and chocolate fix everything! :D And it's great that we can go to God to get wisdom for dealing with all kinds of situations. :D Good reminder.
07/23/07
Enjoyed this - great job on the dialogue.

I felt like some of your "non-dialogue" was unnecessary - you were explaining the people's state of mind when the dialogue already showed it. May just be me, though.
Such an engaging story.
07/23/07
Your story reminded me of the feelings I had as a young woman, and the world of men just seemed so hard to understand. Well, many, many years later, I find they are still sometimes difficult to understand, but such a blessing, too! I got very involved in your conversations and enjoyed reading about the women's struggle and their decision to turn to God for the answers!
I felt like I was sitting in the office chatting with these women. I like how you began and ended with the song. Nice job.
Caffeine, chocolate, prayer, and a song all add up to happiness. This is a good story to illustrate how God guides us to help others in our daily lives.
07/25/07
I like this! It is fresh and original. I like the conflict and contrast between the two characters. Polly is a gem! I especially like the ending where they are both singing. Nice touch. ^_^