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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Happy (07/12/07)

TITLE: To make her happy
By
07/18/07


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“Well... as her doctor, Mrs. Lane,
Your daughter, Sarah, has no pain;
To make her happy, I don’t know…
Perhaps today she’s feeling low.
I really don’t know what to say—
All we can do is pray.”

It’s been a year since Sarah’s fall.
I beseech you, Lord, to heed my call;
To make her happy is my cry.
Tears for my child I can’t deny.
My heart is burdened by her trial—
I need to make her smile.

Beloved Mike comes every day.
His visits wipe her tears away;
To make her happy, he will try…
But finds it hard to say goodbye.
Although he wants to marry her;
To walk she would prefer.

Tonight her smile has gone again—
Sorrow and tears she can’t restrain.
To make her happy, help me, Lord…
Her sadness cannot be ignored.
Tomorrow she’ll be twenty-two…
Lord, help me get her through.

Chocolates and a rose bouquet,
His love for her he can’t betray.
To make her happy, one more time—
Mountains for her, I think he’d climb;
Across the country he would scan…
He’s had a perfect plan.

I’ve never heard her laugh that way—
I think he’s really made her day,
He made her happy, yes he did!
Mike’s romantic but still a kid.
Perhaps one day she’ll be his wife,
For now... a puppy’s changed her life.


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Kenn Allan07/19/07
This poem has everything - tragedy, a hint of romance... and a PUPPY! Wonderful!
Shari Armstrong 07/19/07
A lovely story in poem form - wonderfully written :)
Kate Grey07/19/07
Kenn said it all. :) This is a good read.
Dee Yoder 07/19/07
Really lovely poem! I agree; romance, chocolate, and puppies just can't be beat. Though the trials of the main character are sad, the actions of her loving young man leave me with a smile!
Pat Guy 07/22/07
I too, have to agree with Kenn because he said it all. This takes the reader on a whole spectrum of emotions! And that's a good thing - along with the great writing.

Kudos on this!
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/23/07
Amen to Kenn's comment. This is a keeper.
Joanne Sher 07/23/07
I just love this - can't say it any better than Kenn! Loved the meter.
Elizabeth Baize 07/23/07
I loved the last lines! The puppy was the perfect finale. :-)
Kristen Hester07/25/07
Your sweet poem showed a mom's desire to make her child happy. It was so sweet and I was happy (like the mom) to know there was a devoted boy and a puppy to help.
Rhonda Clark 07/25/07
This is too cute. The flow was great. I felt the mother's agony and the love for her child.

You did a wonderful job.
Patty Wysong07/25/07
So tender--with a touch of romance. What a good job! :-)
LaNaye Perkins07/25/07
What a lovely story you've told in rhyme! Well done!
Esther Gellert07/26/07
This was lovely Chrissy. I loved that it tackled some of the 'sadness' of happiness. Does that make sense? It does to me anyway.
Marilee Alvey07/27/07
What a delightful poem, Chrissy! I loved it! It was filled with harsh realities, a faithful suitor, and a puppy! Now that's the recipe for a successful poem! Well done.