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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Happy (07/12/07)

TITLE: A Day In The Life Of Toes
By Laurie Glass
07/14/07


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Inhale, exhale…
ooohh, aaahh,
ooohh, aaahh…
Revitalizing, ravishing,
renewing, refreshing,
happy to breathe free,
happy are we.

Beep, beep, beep…
blue fuzzies,
fibers give us a zing,
soft, soothing,
between us, feel the tingling,
sensation gets us giggling.

Cold, cold, cold…
step quickly,
stand quietly,
try not to complain.

Dancing droplets…
freely flowing,
trickling, tickling.
Toweling
above,
beneath
and in between -
sparkling drops
dissipate, evaporate,
between us happy toes.

Prepared, perky,
spirited, sprightly,
resolute, ready
for another day.

Weight descends,
we bend,
stable, steady,
we feel the rhythm,
revel in the trend.
We’re up, we’re down,
in the air, on the ground.

Happy for a bit
until we’re feeling squished.
What happened?
Where’s our space?
No longer can we jiggle,
there’s no place
to even wiggle.
We’re sweating,
smelling, suffocating.
Cramped beyond belief,
confined, closed in,
can’t seem to get relief.

Steady, stable steps
a memory,
now suffering
and feeling squeezed,
in misery.
Weight descends,
we bend.
When will it ever end?
Unhappy now are we.

The time has come,
we’re free again,
our misery ends,
unsquished, unsqueezed,
couldn’t be more pleased.

Inhale, exhale…
ooohh, aaahh,
ooohh, aaahh…
revitalizing, ravishing,
renewing, refreshing,
happy to breathe free,
happy toes are we.


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Joanne Sher 07/19/07
Delightful and fun!! This title so intrigued me, I just HAD to read it. Great use of poetic devices!
Beth Muehlhausen07/19/07
Cute, playful, fun - and true! I've always been a barefoot person by nature...seems when the feet are free the rest of me feels free, too. :-)

Nice walk through the day in the life of TOES! You did a great job pulling me in with their various emotions. ;-D



Dee Yoder 07/20/07
Fabulous and fun! I was chuckling out loud while I read this. Thanks for the humor I needed right this moment! By the way, it's not only fun, but well written, too.
Lynda Schultz 07/21/07
I know this has nothing to do with this wonderful piece of poetry you just wrote, but I couldn't help but think "Happy Feet" (the movie) when I read it. Nice work.
Kristen Hester 07/22/07
I'm thinking of my toe ring. Do you think it makes my toe happy or not? Fun, funny poem.
Marilyn Schnepp 07/24/07
I liked this. Nice 'n light, made sense, didn't tax my brain but told me a story, and the Title pulled me in. Thanks for the fun read...perfect!
Linda Watson Owen07/28/07
Oh, what fun!! I love this, Laurie! After a week of very busy Vacation Bible Schooling, my toes can REALLY relate! You so skillfully made our toes talk in this one. Just great!! TOE-tally delightful! ;-)


   
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