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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Happy (07/12/07)

TITLE: No Slum Lords in Heaven
By Marilyn Schnepp
07/14/07


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When my working days were over
I thought I'd be depressed,
But instead my mind and body
Were happy for a rest.

So I moved to a new apartment
Just made for folks like me;
A "Seniors-Only" hi-rise pad
That fit me to a "T".

Aside from my apartment
Which was cozy as could be,
We had a coffee shop and parlor
And benches 'neath a tree.

We also had a Chapel
And a library down the hall
And Security both night and day
In case that we might call.

Growing old was graceful,
I really felt quite blessed.
But suddenly - it happened!
A something I never guessed!

A Slum Lord bought our building,
Every lock, stock and barrel too,
And now I live in a ghetto,
Thanks to Emmanuel Ku.

He took away our light bulbs
And took away our Guards
And filled our library full of junk
While weeds overgrew our yard.

No janitors or yard help
Our elevators are unkempt
And not a breath of air
Comes through our hallway vent.

So many managers have come and gone
They never stay too long;
And should you ask for Maintenance
They ditto with "they've gone!"

Yes, once I was quite happy,
But now I'm glad time's short,
For Mr. Ku will meet THE JUDGE
And answer Him in Court!


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{"For we shall all stand before the judgement seat of Christ....everyone of us shall give account of himself to God." Rom 14:10,12)


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Dee Yoder 07/20/07
Your title drew me right to your poem! And thank our good Lord we won't have to deal with slum lords in heaven. I've had my share in the younger years, instead of the other way around!
Lynda Schultz 07/21/07
Hilarious!
Dolores Stohler07/22/07
This is a sad reminder of yet another of the ills of our society. But I like the poem--it was well-written and clever.
dub W07/22/07
Clever and a little tongue-in-cheek humor mixed with a message. Thanks.
Kristen Hester07/22/07
Wow, what a twist. This wasn't what I expected. I like it a lot. Nice job.
Jeanette Oestermyer 07/25/07
The rhyme scheme works quite well. However, I kept searching for some other poetic devices such as; alliteration, metaphor, simile, enjambment and possibly slant rhyme along with your perfect rhyme. The devices help to take away the monotomy of the rhythm. Good job, keep writing
Marilyn Schnepp 08/20/07
Once again I've been honored with an invitation into the elite Puppy Pen by the Great Professor himself. Thanks for your support, Dub, so "Happy", and such an honor!