The Official Writing Challenge
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07/19/07
I almost expected this to be a bird telling the story. Nicely done, but I thought it was a really quick transition from dreaming to wakefulness. I do like your descriptive phrases and words. This has a good flow and reads well. :)
Nice writing. I could picture the beautiful scene you are describing.
07/20/07
This is wonderful! I love your descriptions and it flows beautifully. I thought you diving into the water from some high point. I was surprised by the ending, but not disappointed. Good job!
This is absolutely beautiful, every line so poetic and exquisitely written. I'm going to add this to my favs.
Should be a winner.
Congratulation on your well deserved win. Your writing is beautiful!
07/26/07
Congratulations on your winning entry!
This gives new expression to the term "sweet sleeps" mentioned in the Psalms! Nice job.
This is so much hidden beauty in this piece; and its reading cannot, should not be rushed. Wow! I can see why this placed and I'm glad that I was able to stop by to read it.
BTW, you left a note on my entry "Something More" I just wanted to say you are absolutely correct as to the metaphores of the piece. Thank-you for the kind comment and once again congratulations on this wonderful essay!