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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Happy (07/12/07)

TITLE: Jackpot
By Benjamin Graber
07/12/07


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Too often Iíve treated life like a casino, throwing minutes into slot machines with the vain hope of hitting the jackpot of happiness;

Too often Iíve searched for ecstasy like a prospector seeking gold, fueled by the dream of striking it rich, but finding that in spite of all my efforts I was only chasing down the wind;

Too often Iíve languished in the desert and prayed for rain to fall, when all the time I waited an oasis stood before my unseeing eyesó

For happiness is not a hidden treasure, which we must sell our souls to find; itís the shadow under every stone, which we must look behind;

It is not the lack of darkness, but the stars that shine throughout the night;

It is not the calming of the storms, but in the midst of turmoil finding peace in Fatherís arms;

It is not the prize at the finish line, but the joy of every step we take, as each becomes a revelation of our Fatherís love for usÖ


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Kristen Hester07/19/07
What beautiful imagery you have here. Very nice.
Rita Garcia07/19/07
Thanks for these wonderful words that washed over my soul, reminding me of our Father's love. Great devotional!
Kate Wells07/19/07
Such lovely expressions of true happiness... thank you
Kate~
Donna Howard07/20/07
This is lovely. Almost poetic. A good reminder, not only of what happiness is, but what it is not. Very nice!
Lynda Schultz 07/21/07
"Too often Iíve languished in the desert and prayed for rain to fall, when all the time I waited an oasis stood before my unseeing eyesó" As soon as I read this line I thought of Hagar. Until she came to the end of herself and all her resources, she was unable to see the well that had been there all the time. And God didn't open her eyes until she came to the end of herself. Thought-provoking work.
Trevas Walker07/23/07
I enjoyed your entry. I especially like this line:

"It is not the calming of the storms, but in the midst of turmoil finding peace in Fatherís arms;"

There is so much truth in that one line. Great Job!
Catrina Bradley 07/23/07
Some excellent truths about happiness to ponder in this short, but very to the point article. Good job!
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/23/07
I liked you excellent use of simile and metaphor. Your last line was my favorite, "The joy of every step we take..."
Delores Baber07/23/07
Enjoyed this brief, but excellent search for happiness. It sometimes seems so elusvie, when, in reality, it's much closer than we think. We're just looking in the wrong direction. Reminded me of a classic book,"Acres of Diamonds."
Joanne Sher 07/23/07
Love the imagery of this - and all the "pearls" throughout. Every line is one to remember.
Angela Linton07/23/07
How true it is that many a times we miss what is right in front of us because we are looking for "it" in the wrong place. Well done.
Dee Yoder 07/23/07
Great imagery and wisdom in your entry. I especially like the flow of the words and how nice it is to read. It's full of little nuggets of truth.
Sherrie Jackson07/23/07
Great job! I loved the truth of each line. And I did enjoy your foray into prose-poetry territory. I'm all for new stuff!
Loren T. Lowery07/25/07
You have some great lines here, much to consider. I would liked to have seen them pushed even further for deeper revelations...you are certainly showing the talent and heart for it!
Sara Harricharan 07/25/07
Short and truly sweet! I think we all hit the jackpot with this one. My only note...I think you were missing a few commas in between. Otherwise, excellent job, I liked the line with the stars best of all. ^_^
Sheri Gordon07/25/07
This is beautiful. It gave me goosebumps. Written so well -- straight to the heart of the matter. Excellent writing.
David Butler 07/25/07
Yeah! I would class this as poetry. Good poetry. You have a unique style. I liked the almost prophetic wisdom in there as well.
Gabrielle Morgan07/25/07
Good wisdom in your story. We often chase after the unnecessary when seeking to fulfil our desires.
Leigh MacKelvey07/26/07
I always look forward to reading your poetic entries! You've submitted yet another example of gorgeous use of language.
David (The Goliath Assassin)12/09/07
Dang, dude! Simply put, and oh, so true... I took this to heart in my own life. Thanks, Ben!