The Official Writing Challenge
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07/12/07
Excellent message, told in such an engaging manner! I love this example, and the interaction among the characters.
07/13/07
Good message, good story, good writing! I loved reading this!
07/13/07
Good point here! Nice writing - I thought I saw a POV shift one place towards the end but I could be wrong.Otherwise - very creative - could be a good published story for teens.
07/15/07
Very good--there's definitely an audience for this piece. Share it with your youth group, for sure.
07/15/07
Very good writing here. I could learn a lot from you by the great dialog you have shown between the characters. Keep up the good work!
07/17/07
Love this! I like the martial arts terms and atmosphere, and especially how it you surprised me in the beginning, I wasn't quite sure where you were going with it. I liked the dialouge especially, very realistic, good characters. Great writing! ^_^
07/17/07
Great object lesson - this could be a skit with the right people of course - who know what they're doing!
Loved it
07/17/07

I don't know anything about this sport, but you made it very interesting. Right on target for topic.
07/17/07
You made some great applications here. This would be an excellent story for teenagers. Well done.
07/17/07
I was just reading where people will not follow someone who is trying to lead unless they show confidence. Your story supports this and I enjoyed the way you were able to bring this out in the martial arts arena. Sounds like something you are familiar with because you did a good job - confidently in fact!
07/17/07
You go, girl! I love this message. A lack of Confidence is what gets many girls in trouble. This is a great, important message.
07/18/07
"Act confidently to show confidence." You "showed" it just right in this story.
07/18/07
This was an enjoyable read with a good message as well... Good job.
07/18/07
I liked this, good moral in the dialogue, great advice for everyone.
07/18/07
Good article on using confidence as a defense and how to accomplish being confident.
07/19/07
At the beginning, I thought this was going to be about domestic violence, but you took me in a totally unexpected direction. I wasn't sure about the message at first (act confident and you'll become confident) mainly because I'm not a confident person. You convinced me by the end, so you did you your job well. Great entry - congrats on your 22nd and 8th places!!!
07/20/07
Great story Peej. It left me wishing I knew some teenage girls I could share it with.