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07/13/07
Wow! This story reminds me of the Jonestown disaster several years ago. Indoctrination is never good; Christian or not. A suspenseful story.
07/13/07
Good ending!! The suspense built well - good title too.
07/14/07
Very good. The suspense built well and was resolved wonderfully at the end.
07/14/07
Great job with the suspense here. You had me riveted for sure!
Thanks so much for a story in which a boy's beliefs are assured. I liked how the frama built and that the grandparents did come. Nice!!
07/15/07
Oh, wow! More, more, more! There's a novel in this one!
Oh, I got chills when I read "They had come." This is soooo good. I really enjoyed every word. I am so glad the boy was confident in his grandparent's love and that they did indeed come.