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Wow! This story reminds me of the Jonestown disaster several years ago. Indoctrination is never good; Christian or not. A suspenseful story.
Good ending!! The suspense built well - good title too.
Very good. The suspense built well and was resolved wonderfully at the end.
Great job with the suspense here. You had me riveted for sure!
Thanks so much for a story in which a boy's beliefs are assured. I liked how the frama built and that the grandparents did come. Nice!!
Oh, wow! More, more, more! There's a novel in this one!
Oh, I got chills when I read "They had come." This is soooo good. I really enjoyed every word. I am so glad the boy was confident in his grandparent's love and that they did indeed come.