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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Confident (07/05/07)

TITLE: Go to the Ant, Thou Slug
By Beth LaBuff


Betwixt svelte emerald spikes of grass,
Within the loam they thrive en masse,
And toil to lay-up treasured foods --
An ant hill colony.

Martha Ant, a lively worker,
Never was a slacker-shirker.
Gathered foodstuff for her queen --
She served most faithfully.

A strange encounter, Monday late,
While foraging ‘neath garden gate,
A caller sought out Martha Ant
One question on his mind.

His name was Rusty Vander Slug.
He voiced his query to the bug.
“Wise Ant, why do you stash and hoard
The provender you find?”

“I’ve watched you scurry, laboring,
Never changing your routine.
Your drive I cannot comprehend --
Nor logic can perceive.”

Then Martha eyed the gastropod,
She saw no trace of a façade.
His enquiry was most sincere
With no thought to deceive.”

With prudent words, Martha explained,
“With summer’s store we’ll be sustained.
Of deprivation -- meager fare,
We’ll be delivered from.”

“With winter’s peril, ravaging,
We have in stock insect cuisine.
So for the morrow we’ll not fear --
We’ll laugh at days to come.”

Inspiration from:
Proverbs 6:6 - Go to the ant, thou sluggard; consider her ways, and be wise: KJV
Proverbs 30:25 - Ants are creatures of little strength, yet they store up their food in the summer. NIV
Proverbs 31:21 - When it snows, she has no fear for her household: NIV
Proverbs 31:25 - She can laugh at the days to come. NIV

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Verna Cole Mitchell 07/12/07
I loved this fantastic poem. It is perfectly written!
Benjamin Graber07/13/07
Cute poem; I enjoyed this!
Dee Yoder 07/13/07
Love this title and the poem is delightful! I enjoyed every morsel.
Jan Ackerson 07/13/07
Really good poem; I especially liked the interesting metrical structure.
Elizabeth Baize 07/13/07
This gave so much imagery to those verses. I'll probably think of your poem now when I read through the Proverbs. You took me right down to the ant's level, even "beneath the garden gate!"
David Butler 07/13/07
Very skillful use of humour as well as clever wording. Fascinating poetic form. I've never seen one like that before, and I like it too.
Only thing to pick up on is an unruly quotation mark, which you've probably already noticed. Well done.
Sharlyn Guthrie07/13/07
I enjoyed your poem immensely. Your first line was an excellent hook and you kept my interest to the end.
Joanne Sher 07/14/07
Delightful - I love the rhythm of this.
Ed VanDeMark07/14/07
It's an art to make a point with poetry. Good job.
TJ Nickel07/17/07
The structure, vocabulary, reference, and theme are all superb. I liked the length. At the end, I paused and wanted to find more - not in length, but in the body. You've got some serious skill on display here.
Linda Watson Owen08/28/07
Decided to delve back a week and now I'm still dancing to the lilt of this witty and delightful poem! Love the name Rusty Van der Slug! So cute and with a point that is clearly yet entertainingly presented! Great job!
Helen Dowd 05/30/08
I loved this poetic conversation between industrious ant and sluggish slug. I detest slugs. Your comparison was great. How different these two creatures are. And how clever of you to title your poem that, taking the verse and using it to bring out the truth....Thanks for your comment on my challenge article...Helen