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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Confident (07/05/07)

TITLE: A Senior's Lament
By Verna Cole Mitchell
07/05/07


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Iíve been blessed by a faithful God
And mostly been content,
But every misplaced confidence,
I offer up lament.

I was so hopeful I could keep
My memory alive,
But those thoughts I would not forget
Have struggled to survive.

I felt assured those dear to me
Would never from me stray,
But some have moved, and some have died,
And some just went away.

I hoped my body would stay strong
To last through days and hours,
But it has wilted and grown weak,
Like last springís brightest flowers.

I wanted to rely upon
Experience Iíve had,
But much of it has not been good,
And more of itís been sad.

At times I put my faith in things
And hoped theyíd never fade,
But one by one they disappeared,
And I was left betrayed.

I trusted in what I could do,
Convinced that I might win,
But God saw my self-confidence
As just another sin.

Yet confidently can I go
With Jesus as my friend.
Forgiven, I am in Godís care.
Heíll keep me till the end.


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Benjamin Graber07/12/07
I like the ending of this one - in spite of our lacks of confidence we still have a friend to the end.
Good job, keep up the good work!
Jan Ackerson 07/12/07
Wonderful poem, with all the elements that elevate a poem into the ranks of excellence.
Dee Yoder 07/12/07
I can relate to sooo many passages here. This is really a wonderful poem! You've captured thoughts and failures we've all had, beautifully.
Joanne Sher 07/13/07
Charming and lovely. I love how lighthearted and serious - at the same time - this is. A blessing to me for sure.
Julie Ruspoli07/13/07
Oh, I just love this poem. It rhymes beautifully. Such a blessing to read.
Helen Paynter07/15/07
I enjoyed the gentle humour and the pathos in this poem - cleverly constructed and well-balanced. Well done!
Debi Derrick07/15/07
This poem is very well put together and a true blessing.
Beth LaBuff 07/15/07
As I get older I understand this more and more. I like the phrase you used, "misplaced confidence". This is very good and flows well.
Edy T Johnson 07/16/07
What true statements in your poem! Youth worries about "self" confidence. Perhaps it takes years to realize this "misplaced confidence," finding only in the embrace of our precious Savior how to be truly "confident." You are right on topic and on target with your poetry, here.
Loren T. Lowery07/17/07
How true, our faith, our only hope is Him. This was beautifully written with a profound message.
Sharlyn Guthrie07/17/07
Lovely poem...beautiful message!
Patty Wysong07/17/07
oh! What a good one! Self-confidence vs. confidence in God. Very good!
Linda Watson Owen07/17/07
Beautifully bittersweet! You've struck home with so many of your readers here, and age doesn't even have to be a factor in this one. This goes straight to the heart in such lovely rhyme and rhythm. Loved it!
Dixie Phillips 07/18/07
Great description of this season of life. I think what blessed me the most about your piece was the way you started and ended with God's faithfulness! Thank you very much!
Sara Harricharan 07/18/07
Very well done! To the point and easy to relate to. The second to last verse was very meaningful. My only note is the second line in the second verse kind of seems...short? Could just be me though. Good job. ^_^
Trevas Walker07/18/07
A beautifully written poem. I love the comparison implied between confidence in self or in God. Great writing!
Kristen Hester07/18/07
Ohhhh! I love this beautiful poem. It blessed me today.
Clyde Blakely 07/18/07
Hopefully this does not become every Senior's lament and learn from a Senior while they are young. Well written. God bless.
Marilyn Schnepp 07/18/07
Nicely done - I enjoyed this very much. Great message!
Mariane Holbrook07/19/07
Verna, this is great! I'm going to have to read more of your poetry. What a lovely piece!
Elizabeth Baize 07/19/07
I really appreciated the spirit of this poem. It is such a good reminder of the One we can be confident in.
Thank you for sharing this.
Blessings,
Elizabeth
Dianne Janak09/02/07
"I felt assured those dear to me, would never from me stray..."
The human condition in a nutshell... love and loss and loss and love... can't get around it, deny it, and yet HE is always there, no matter what...! Hope for us springs eternal.. GREAT WRITING!