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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Confident (07/05/07)

TITLE: Laurels
By Benjamin Graber
07/05/07


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The laurels I once called my own
Have slipped, forgotten, through the cracks
Which still deface my wounded heart,
The pain announcing all I lack;

The confidence I once held dear
Was blown away by winter winds,
Though spring has come, my heartís not thawed,
So many fears still have me pinned;

Now summerís bringing love again,
So many dancing dreams are born,
But Iíve got nothing left to giveó
The ribbons I once won are torn;

The confidence I once held dear
Is dead and cannot be revived,
But I am praying for a change
To bring my frozen heart alive;

I bring petitions to my Father,
Iím begging for the strength to stand:
I feel the warmth of life again
As Jesus takes me by the hand;

The confidence I find in Christ
Has brought me everything I needó
Iíve nothing of my own to give,
But still by faith I will proceed,

I have no laurels left to offer,
No ribbons to pronounce my love;
Iíll give her just the cross of Christ
And know that it will be enough.


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Jan Ackerson 07/12/07
What an amazing, well-written poem!
Seema Bagai 07/12/07
A wonderful poem that spoke to my heart.
Joanne Sher 07/13/07
I love especially the imagery/word picture in the very first stanza. Wonderful message as well!
Judith Hope07/13/07
What a warm, wonderfully evocative poem. Confidentally written, beautifully balanced
Beth LaBuff 07/15/07
I liked what you captured here and especially this, "I have no laurels left to offer,
No ribbons to pronounce my love;
Iíll give her just the cross of Christ
And know that it will be enough." Yes, IT WILL BE ENOUGH. Thanks for this pictures!
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/17/07
What an absolutely beautiful love poem with praise to the Father. My favorite lines:
I've nothing of my own to give,
But still by faith I will proceed.
Sharlyn Guthrie07/17/07
Powerful, moving poem! I especially like the final stanza.
Dee Yoder 07/17/07
Very beautiful poem! It's just lovely.
Patty Wysong07/17/07
Wonderful! That first stanza really paints a vivid picture. Good job!!
Terry R A Eissfeldt 07/17/07
Well Done,
Great progression. Every one can relate to these thoughts but not everyone gets to the same conclusion - too bad... Thanks for the vulnerbility and hope you poem expresses
Trevas Walker07/18/07
You have a real talent for poetry. Your entry was awsome.
Sara Harricharan 07/18/07
Very nice! I like the change and the ryhming stanza. My only note is the third line in the second stanza...didn't seem to quite flow with the rest of it. Apart from that, lovely! ^_^
dub W07/18/07
Wonderful warm poem, overall very well done. I wonder why you substituted a comma for a simicolon in the fourth stanza?
Loren T. Lowery07/18/07
Not everyone can put their emotions and thoughts into such lovely, poetic form and leave a message everyone can understand. Nice job! Keep up the great work.
Kristen Hester07/18/07
I like this. I like it a lot. Thanks!
Jacquelyn Horne07/18/07
All of our confidence lies with Christ.
Dixie Phillips 07/18/07
Loved the emphasis on your confidence in Christ. Very reflective.
Marilyn Schnepp 07/18/07
Had to read this twice to catch on that this was a man writing about a new found love; a sweetheart. It dawned on me that the "she" was something I'd overlooked. Now, it all makes sense - and it is really lovely. I loved it!
Pat Guy 07/18/07
Very beautiful word usage here. This is a joy to read yet one to connect with.

Lovely.

David Butler 07/19/07
A true poem. Traditional poetry would frown at the occasional (slant?) rhyme and occasional stumbling meter. But the imagery and metaphors more than make up for it.
I like the way you began and ended with the laurel theme.
It took me a few reads to grasp what it was actually saying. But does poetry necessarily have to say anything beyond the expressed overflowings of the heart?
Leigh MacKelvey07/20/07
This was really well written poetry. Don't worry about traditional poetry! Slant rhymes and varying meter make this poem much more interesting to read. This was also tgought-provoking, challenging to the reader and introuced a "Reader's Surprise", as all good poems must do! I loved it, you have a talent to be used by God. Don't give it up!
David (The Goliath Assassin)10/10/07
Hey, man... I felt this poem hit right home. You give good, practical advice here. So when I'm feeling like I've got nothing left to offer, I'll remember to offer the cross. And if it is denied, she wasn't right for me to begin with. But if she's right, then it will be enough. Thanks, man.