The Official Writing Challenge
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07/12/07
What a precious poem for the King!

A few things: I could be wrong, but I don't think "guise" is a verb, and you've also mixed your metaphors a bit--in a few stanzas, you're a vessel, but you're also a prisoner, and stumbling...maybe tighten this up a little?

The last stanza was particularly powerful.
07/12/07
This is a great reminder of the power of Christ to forgive and transform us. And of the Father, who accepts us, failures and all!
07/13/07
I love how beautifully clear this message was. Lovely.
07/15/07
I really like the vessel metaphor here. And this line is powerful, "This confidence is not my own It came from Blood shed by His Son." Thank you!
07/18/07
As I read..."With nail-scarred hands, He'd cup my chin" - the lump in my throat gave way to a burst of tears! That, my friend, is the sign of a Masterful Writer; to move your reader to emotions! Thanks! Loved it! God Bless!