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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write something in the YOUNG ADULT or TEEN genre (06/07/07)

TITLE: Dating Games
By Debbie OConnor
06/13/07


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It was time.

Jordan walked slowly down the crowded hallway toward his locker. Her stomach writhed—eagle-sized butterflies warring within. One last deep breath and a brilliant smile, “Hi, Brian.”

Warm brown eyes swam into focus. “Hey Jordan. Having a good day?”

She played casual. “Oh sure, but Rookwood just assigned a killer project for Critical Thinking. How are you?”

“Not bad. What’s the project?”

“We have to read Plato’s Apology and defend or refute his ideas in a persuasive paper.”

“Err…I’m sorry.”

“Me too.” Jordan laughed. He was so nice. “Um, Brian…I was wondering…would you come to the Sadie Hawkins dance with me?”

“Thanks for asking…” he said, hesitating. A red glow tinged his cheeks.

He’s going to say no. She could feel it. She wished she could sink through the floor into oblivion.

Brian looked earnestly into her eyes. “Jordan, I don’t date. At all.”

“Why?” She was shocked. She knew Brian had never had a girlfriend. Some of her friends had suggested he was gay after throwing themselves at him unsuccessfully. Her gut told her they were wrong.

“Have you noticed how much trouble dating causes in this school?” Brian asked. “Our friends go out, swap partners, gossip, backstab, make out, have sex, get pregnant…it’s ridiculous…” he sighed. “I’m a Christian, Jordan…”

The bell rang. They were late.

Jordan turned away, her cheeks flaming. She wished she’d never asked him.

“Jordan, would you meet me at lunch? I want to explain. I like you. I hope we can be friends.”

Friends. She hated that word. Still, maybe it would be easier if she understood. She really liked him—she couldn’t help it. “Okay,” she whispered without looking back.

Morning classes were a blur. Jordan jotted a note to her best friend, Taylor, in English. “He said no. He wants to talk to me at lunch.”

“Are you going to meet him?” Taylor wrote back.

Jordan nodded at her friend across the aisle; Taylor grimaced back.

“Brian watching” had been Jordan’s favorite hobby for two years. He was tall and athletic, easily the smartest guy in their class and completely unattainable. Most of the girls in school had tried to snag him. He was kind, but seemed immune.

Jordan fought her attraction longer than most. She became Brian’s friend—also kind and apparently immune. Only Taylor knew. Jordan was determined that he would love her.

What Jordan wanted, she usually got, but Brian was different from anything or anyone she’d ever wanted. He frightened her.

It’s over, she told herself. What was it he said…something about being a Christian?

She felt lightheaded as she entered the cafeteria. Brian immediately led her to a corner.

“I’m so glad you’re willing to listen, Jordan. Most girls won’t. There’s something special about you.”

Jordan’s eyes filled. She focused on the table. No, she screamed inwardly…don’t you dare cry!

If Brian noticed, he pretended he didn’t. “I take dating seriously. I try to please God with everything I do. I’m only seventeen,” his words were jumbled rush. “I’m working toward a scholarship for college, serving my church, playing baseball…there isn’t time for much more. I’m not ready for more…but that doesn’t mean I don’t need friends. I hope you’ll still be one of them.”

His words rolled over her. She wasn’t sure what to think. Did she want to forget Brian? Was she his friend or had he just been a challenge?

“Thanks for talking to me Brian,” she said slowly. “It helps. I…I’m not sure how I feel. It was hard for me to ask you out. I’ve wanted to ask you for a long time.”

“I’m sorry. I hope you believe me.”

Jordan looked up, surprised. “Of course, I believe you. I know you’ve turned down most of the girls in school. I’m just disappointed. I hoped I’d be the one to change your mind.”

“Jordan, you’re amazing. You are the most honest girl I’ve ever met.”

Jordan laughed a little. “You know, you aren’t easing the disappointment by being so nice.”

“Sorry…should I be mean?” He smirked at her, a glimmer of hope lighting his eyes.

She wadded her napkin and threw it at him. He grinned and caught it. “Jordan, do you go to church?”

“Not often…Easter, Christmas…here and there.”

“Would you like to come to a youth meeting with me? It’s fun.”

“Are you asking me out?”

Brian laughed. “In a way…yeah. I guess I am.”


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Dee Yoder 06/14/07
This is a perfect teen story and I like the young man's stance on dating. Not "dating" during High School is a new idea among some Christian teens which your story could help to explain.
Kristen Hester06/15/07
Great story. If I wasn't married, I'd get a crush on Brian, too. Super!
Cheri Hardaway 06/15/07
Love the morals portrayed by very believable characters in this story. I think teens would respond to these characters and be encouraged by their blossoming values. This story is just the beginning; it leaves the reader wanting more, wanting to find out what happens to Jordan. Maybe it's Chapter One of more to come??? Blessings, Cheri
Mo 06/15/07
Very good!
Marilee Alvey06/16/07
At first, as I read this, I found myself saying, "Yeah, right..." However, something magical happened later and I'm not sure how you did it: I suspended my disbelief and went with the story line. That's the mark of a good writer: that they're able to get you to suspend your disbelief. It's a tough job when it's a talking animal, but in a way I think this was more difficult: a handsome, athletic teenage boy with raging hormones who says no to dating! I know it is possible: my daughter held her boyfriend off with no kissing for about eight months, I think it was, and they've been happily married for five years now. He thought she gave up kissing for Lent! I wish we COULD turn around this dating game and make this the trend. Your story gives others that opportunity to at least consider it. Bravo! Well done!
Joanne Sher 06/18/07
Great perspective, and vivid characterization. Right on target for the intended audience. Enjoyed this!
Betty Castleberry06/21/07
Oh wow, Brian is every mother's dream guy for her daughter. This is well done. I love the message. Congrats on your placement.
Rita Garcia06/21/07
WOW! EC - Congratulations, Debbie, Fantastic story!
Crista Darr06/21/07
Woo hoo! What a wonderful story with a perfect, feel-good ending. I love it. And what a confirmation for you, Deb. This is definitely your genre! Excellent work!
Joanne Sher 06/21/07
Congrats! Awesome, dear friend.
Yulanda Ridge06/22/07
I really enjoyed this, and read it to my 2 teens. I also believe in rather courting than dating.
Yes, this could be chapter 1 of more to come! :) Well done on EC! Y.
Cheri Hardaway 07/05/07
Just wanted to say CONGRATS on the EC win!!! Well deserved! Blessings, Cheri