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At first I thought this was going to be a typical teen run away story, but it wasn't. Nice twist, although I admit I didn't quite get all the details. I wasn't sure if leaving the Bible was a good thing or a bad thing. No matter, this piece was well written. Kudos.
06/14/07
Nice story. My favorite line was, "A gold pendant, shaped like a teardrop, with nothing inside. As empty as I feel." Brilliant imagery.
Oh, I feel silly. If I had looked at the title I would have understood about the Bible. (blush)
06/15/07
Wow. Very interesting. It really fits the genre. At first, I thought it was going to be a suicide story, but you surprised me. I'd love to have more details, though. I'm going to expect a follow up to this story in the near future (no pun intended ;). I really loved the whole "something to leave behind" line and how it all tied in. Keep up the great work!
06/15/07
I love the title and how the story unfolds what it means. Descriptions are great throughout.

I must admit, I wanted many, many more details. I wanted to understand more thoroughly what was going on.

Well-written. Kept my attention focused all the way through, and left me wanting more. Blessings, Cheri
06/15/07
Great twist here, I didn't see it going the way that it did. I too wanted more details, I sense the word limit was the culprit. Nice job, the title was perfect!
06/18/07
I hope this is the start of something longer, Sara. You definitely got my interest! Great description and characterization.
06/18/07
More, please!

A nitpick: "Bible" is always capitalized.

Honestly--this begs to be expanded. I was utterly delighted when it became sci-fi, and immediately wanted to read chapters and chapters of this.
It looks like you have a chapter in your sci-fi novel!
Your descriptions are beautiful. I loved the tears on the Bible. An outstanding story!
06/18/07
Wow! What an interesting, unusual story! With it's Sci-Fi theme, I'm sure it would capture the attention of teens. I thought it was going to be an "ordinary" story, but you certainly fooled me with this creative entry! :)
06/18/07
Wow, I was fooled twice as to where you were going. I like the twists and surprises. Great descriptions, great writing. :)
You certainly seem to have a knack for Sci-fi with your imaginative writing and story telling. I like the way your characters all appear warm and personable - people I woulnd't mind following along in an extended adventure.
Wow. How creative and interesting. I wanted to read much more about this adventure/mission. Great writing!
Wow, this one is sad but powerful. I enjoyed the read.
06/20/07
I bow to your writing ability and sure glad i'm in beginners and you are in advanced! I really liked this story, it is a very unusal peice and well written.
06/20/07
I really like this. I love that you fit a sci fi piece into the teen genre and it just works. Great job! You left me wanting to read more.
Very good. Very creative. I hope to see more of it.
Very creative piece, and I'm sure many teens fantasize about leaving their unhappy life situations behind. A trip to the future? Why not? Keep up the great writing.