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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write something in the YOUNG ADULT or TEEN genre (06/07/07)

TITLE: Rebel Rap
By David Butler


A hip-hop dance piece, set in a Zealot’s cave in Judaea, circa 30AD in the time of the Roman occupation.

Cast: B’rabbas (Rebel chief), Simon, Gangster Girl and Rebels’ Chorus, all in period costume of Jewish rebels and thieves.

Hey B’rabbas, boss! I’ve had it wit’ dis rebel thang! Like, I’m outa here, man! I’m runnin’ wit’ dat prophet J.C. and his Nazarene Dream Team.

You gonna WHAT?? (Echoes)

(Rap beat begins. Everyone starts movin’.)

Hey Bro, don’t go! Like, yo’ part o’ dis crew!
All d’ rebels stick together. What’s d’ matter wit’ you?
We could hassle on d’ Romans if we all got guts.
Den we knock ‘em off d’ block, gonna kick their butts!
You’re a Jew, boy.
Gotta stay true, boy…
Don’t quit. Don’t split. ‘Coz we gotta see it through, boy.

Rebels’ Chorus (sing):
Woah, Simon, whatcha gonna do?
Aint freedom fightin’ good enough for you?
Hey Simon, dontcha be a geek.
‘Coz it’s so not cool t’ be a Jesus freak.

Simon (raps):
A rebel givin’ trouble, he aint goin’ no place.
Like, good men die when dey get in Herod’s face.
Dis stuff, it aint nothin’ but a dead-end street.
Messiah Man rocks, ’coz He’s got a better beat.
… Aint no solution!..
And bustin’ mah guts aint gonna change d’ Institootion!

Gangster Girl (Kneels before Simon and sings):
Woah Simon, … don’t leave me!
Woah Simon, …don’t grieve me!
Simon, mah boo, yo’ breakin’ mah heart! (Simon shakes his head sadly.)

B’rabbas (raps)
Dis Messiah you admire, man, He makes like a freak.
If ya get one in d’ face, He says “Turn d’ other cheek.”
If we gonna lick d’ Romans, like we gotta treat ‘em mean
Not d’ soul-searchin’ **** like dis Nazarene scene.
He’s a fake, man.
Tell ya, it’s a take, man…
You’z a goin’ d’ right way to make a big mistake, man.

Rebels repeat: “Woah, Simon etc”

Simon (raps)
Don’t mess wit’ d’ Messiah, He knows what it’s all about.
He got lerve from aberve for d’ folks dat bummed out.
He can give ‘em a new livin’ when they think they gonna die.
He can level wit’ d’ devil and den stick him in d’ eye.
He’s d’ Man…
He got a plan…
..To fill d’ hole in mah soul like nobody else can.

(Beat stops abruptly and they all freeze on the word “Bro”)

So Bro, ya gotta come and follow dis Messiah Man. (Grunt!)

(Police siren sounds and they all run into hiding, except Simon, who walks off stage.
Gangster girl comes out of hiding and runs after him.)

© 2007

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Dee Yoder 06/19/07
Here's my confession: I know nothing about rap! But I like your entry and I think teens would like it, too. It fits the genre and the age group.
Jan Ackerson 06/19/07
Oh my, this is an absolute masterpiece! Best I've read this week.
Myrna Noyes06/19/07
This is AWESOME!! It's creative and oh-so-cool!!!!! :D I could visualize the whole play and hear the rap rhythm in my mind! It carries a powerful message, too, and I love the historical setting! GREAT WRITING!!!!!!! :)
Joanne Sher 06/19/07
Oh, man - this had to be an absolute BLAST to write. What a creative take. This totally blew me away. I don't like rap either, but I LOVED this!
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/20/07
A very creative take in this genre--surely of great appeal to teens.
Brenda Welc06/20/07
They say white grils can't rap but I think I just did! This was a very creative way to get your point across. Great job!
Benjamin Graber06/20/07
This one is hilarious... :-) Great job!
Sara Harricharan 06/20/07
I don't know why this doesn't have more comments. This is excellent! Supberb stuff. I can't think of a teen that wouldn't be laughing all the way through this. Using rap was a great, creative twist here. I definitely know some teens who are going to love this! Excellent writing! ^_^