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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write something in the YOUNG ADULT or TEEN genre (06/07/07)

TITLE: Only The Beginning
By Rita Garcia
06/08/07


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Lindsay entered the double doors of her new high school. Now to find my locker. “I don’t need this.” She said out loud, tossing her long golden strands over her shoulder.

“Having a problem?”

She turned and looked into the most incredible brown eyes.

“I…I can’t get this locker open.”

“Let me try, I’m David. You’re the new minister’s daughter, right?”

“That’s me, I’m Lindsay.”

“These locks are always sticking. Where’s your first class?”

“According to my schedule it’s…room…201.”

“Miss Rose – she’s a cool teacher.”

Canyon Lake might not be so bad after all.

Much to her surprise, she gravitated to the pace of small town life; the afternoons were still warm enough for a swim. The feel of the sun with the soft breeze off the water was hypnotic.

“Hey, sleeping beauty, mind some company?” David said, dropping down onto the warm sand.

She felt the shyness cover her like a shroud. This is silly, why is this any different than talking to him at school?

“I wonder how you’d feel about going to the homecoming dance.”

“With you?”

“Well…yeah, that’s…what I had in mind.”

“I’m sorry, I…I’d like that,”

Lindsay floated home, feeling like she was walking on one of the fluffy clouds in the September sky.

“How was school?”

You’ll never believe it Mom. David asked me to homecoming.” Lindsay twirled around the room.

“You’d think he ask you to marry him.”

“It could happen.”

“Hmmm, let’s stick with homecoming.”


Following a flurry of preparations the big moment seemed to sneak in when she wasn’t looking. Why all the butterflies in my stomach?Her hand brushed across the silky blue of her dress, touching the delicate flowers stitched into the fabric. She glanced in the mirror as she heard the chime of the bell.

Gliding down the stairs her skirt moved ever so gently. Her father looked up. She saw his eyes water, and placed a kiss on his cheek.

“I’ll get it,” said her mom, wiping her hands on her apron. “Come in David.”

“Hello Mrs. Phillips, Pastor Jim.” seeing Lindsay he did a double take. “Wow, you look sensational.”

“We won’t be late.” She took David’s arm and waltzed out the door.

Decorations were even hung outside the gymnasium. The band was in full swing as they entered the room. David guided her toward the dance floor.

“Okay, the big moment, homecoming King and Queen, everybody ready?” Mr. Kirk, the school principal, looked down at the cards. “Homecoming King, David Stevens.” The shouts and applause was ear shattering. “David take the hand of your Queen, Marcy Dalton.”

Lindsay felt the tears burning. She’d never expected to be chosen, it just had never occurred to her that David would. She watched as David and Marcy twirled around the floor. She knew from the gossip-chain that Marcy liked David, a lot. She slipped from the room.

The next few days she avoided David and refused his phone calls. Mostly, she sulked in her room. I wish we would have never moved here, I hate it.

“Lindsay, phone.”

“I don’t want to talk to anyone.”

“It’s Marcy, you can’t keep avoiding people.”

“Hi,” Lindsay mumbled.

“I know I’m the last person you want to talk to. Please, listen. I did go the Homecoming Dance without an escort. I knew we were the two most likely to be crowned. I hoped it would make David would realize we belong together. It didn’t happen, David was upset, he threw down his crown and left. If I had someone that crazy about me I sure wouldn’t be giving him the silent treatment, he doesn’t deserve it Lindsay.”

“I’m confused, I feel like I don’t belong here. I can’t believe your calling, being a friend, after what I did. I guess I messed up.” Lindsay wiped at her tears.

“You had me pegged right. It back fired. I can’t standby and watch you and David be miserable.”

“Thanks, Marcy.”

Lindsay called David, they agreed to talk.

Hand-in-hand, they walked around the lake. David placed his jacket around her shoulders. Without warning the sky turned an ominous black and opened up with a down pour of rain,

“I think I better get you home, we are both soaked,” he said.

“I think we have something you can change into, and I’ll make us some hot coco.” She pulled her long wet strands to one side and smiled.

“If your offer includes marshmallows, it’s a deal.”

And this was only the beginning.


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Leigh MacKelvey06/16/07
This was very sweet and enjoyble to read. The descriptions and little details made the story. Great job!
Debbie Roome 06/17/07
Flowed well, natural dialogue. Good story.
Joanne Sher 06/18/07
Sweet and lovely. The homecoming date seemed to come on awfully quickly, but I'm sure that was a word count thing (LOL or my niavete!). I would have loved this as a teen!
Jan Ackerson 06/18/07
Sweet story! Teen girls love romance.

Something about the timing of the events seemed a bit "off", and if this had been for adults, I'd have thought it was too neatly resolved, but teens love resolution, so you "done good."

It's so hard to go to a new school! You really tapped perfectly into what that anxiety feels like.
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/18/07
This is a good, believable teen romance. I believe girls especially would really enjoy this story.
Benjamin Graber06/18/07
Good story. I really liked how Marcy gave up her own desires in the story, for the sake of what she saw was best...
Loren T. Lowery06/19/07
Took me back to my high school days and all the angst about asking someone new out, starting relationships, etc. I enjoyed the characters and the story you wove for them.
It looks like this is only the beginning for the two of them.
Kristen Hester06/20/07
What a sweet teen romance. These are so popular and more are needed that are written from a Christian perspective. I wish you had a larger word count. It was a long time to span to fit into 750 words, but you did a good job!
Brenda Welc06/20/07
Let me say awwww.... This was a beautiful piece to read. Very well written--what errors-I only saw one! Keep on writing this was nice.
Sara Harricharan 06/20/07
Hmmm, I liked this. Kinda sweet/romancy like. lol. It's nice. But Lindsay-I can't really say I connected with her, she seemed kind of superficial. David was okay and Marcy, she seemed a little more mature when she finally called up Lindsay to talk. Otherwise, not too bad. ^_^
Betty Castleberry06/21/07
"And this was only the beginning." Indeed.
You should write more and let us know how things are progressing with the two of them. Very sweet and well written.