The Official Writing Challenge
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06/07/07
Wow, really clever way of getting that scriptural point across! I'm sure kids would get it, also.
06/08/07
What a cute story! I love the imagination used here, as well as the message. I believe fifth graders would like it as well.
06/08/07
Love it, love it, love it. Very creative and a wonderful spiritual lesson. I think this story would be particularly engaging for kids. I think you had one minor typo, but that should not be a big deal at all.
06/09/07
P.S. The MC's voice is marvelous.
06/10/07
I love they way you tucked a message inside this wonderful story.
06/11/07
Thought provoking!
06/12/07
Wow - great fun story and wonderful thought provoking ending! I too loved the narrator's voice throughout and the pace and how you interjected other children's names and whims. Very good writing!
06/13/07
This is not stupid as you had thought in your message on the messageboard hon.Your story was engaging and very thoughtprovoking without being preachy or too much. I relaly like the point you made here and liked your descriptions too as I felt I was there in class and cafetaria.:0) Great job. Other than the typo this is a VERY COOL story!!!Janice
06/13/07
This is a very creative story with a great message. I really like it!
06/13/07
This is AWESOME--I can't believe I'd missed it up until now. You're right--a full-length chapter book could easily be made from this extremely creative topic. Love the ending...love everything about this story.
06/13/07
This is awesome. I hope you DO write this book! I would certainly buy it. Absolutely creative and engaging and wonderful.