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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write something suitable for CHILDREN (05/31/07)

TITLE: The Adventures of Donkey Odee
By Larry Elliott
06/06/07


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This story is about Odee.

Odee is a donkey.

Donkey Odee may be small in size, but he has a big heart. He is usually friendly to everyone he meets- usually.

After stretching and shaking the straw from his back Odee moseys down toward the big barn for breakfast.

The horses are nice, but never wait when it comes to meal time and the grain will soon be gone.

Donkey Odee sees Bessie and Bossie, the Jersey sisters, resting under the shade of an oak tree.

“Eee-awh, (that’s ‘Hello’ in donkey language), Bessie, eee-awh, Bossie.”

“Good morning, Donkey Odee.” They mooed.

“I'm going to the big barn for breakfast. Would you like to join me?”

“Naw, we’re still chewing yesterday’s lunch.”

“Have either of you seen Penelope Pinto? We’re supposed to walk to breakfast together this morning?”

Bossie burped loudly. “Oops, excuse me. Penelope stopped to say good morning, talked to the snake in the tree then trotted off in a hurry.”

Odee looked up and saw a rat snake sunning on a limb.

“Do you know where Penelope has gone, Mr. snake?”

“Yessss, but I’m not telling.” he hissed.

“Why not?”

“Becaussss. I may be a rat ssssnake, but I’m not a rat fink. Anyway, Sssshe ssssaid for you not to look for her today.”

That might have hurt Odee’s feelings, but he knew the rat snake was a liar and could not be trusted.

“Did you hear that?” Donkey Odee asked suddenly.

“The snake?” Bossie asked.

“No.” Odee said. “It sounds like someone crying.”

“I hear the wind in the trees.” Said Bessie.

“I hear bull frogs by the pond.” Bossie added.

“No.” Odee was becoming impatient. His ears went straight up twisting from side to side like furry brown antennae. “It sounds like Penelope and it’s coming from the back pasture where the wild ponies roam. She’s in trouble.”

Donkey Odee took off as fast as his short legs could carry him.

He followed Penelope’s cries for help and found her surrounded by a bunch of wild ponies.

“What’s going on, here?” Odee shouted.

The leader, a brown appaloosa, turned to face Odee.

“Hoof it out of here, big ears, before you get hurt.”

The insult would have offended Odee if he wasn’t so angry- and scared.

“You guys just waste all day chewing on loco weeds then go looking for trouble. Come on Penelope, let’s go.”

“Hit the bunny trail, rabbit ears. The filly stays with us.” The appaloosa lowered his head and snorted pawing the ground, flinging chunks of dirt in the air.

Odee said a brief prayer for courage then stood on his hind legs his front hoofs beating the air and shouted at the top of his lungs, “Eeeeaww haw haw haw!”

The wild ponies all looked at Donkey Odee and began to laugh. Then they fell silent.

Behind Odee, and visible only to the troublemakers, was a herd of gigantic stallions. There were white ones and black ones. Each was beautiful and five times the size of a normal horse. Some had wings and were hovering just above the rest and all looked like they meant business.

The most magnificent of the winged steeds glared at the appaloosa then said, “Boo.”

All the mischievous ponies galloped away fast squealing like day old foals.

“My hero. How did you ever find me?” Penelope asked Odee.

“I was by the big oak and heard you cry for help.”

“Oh those wonderful ears.” Penelope cooed and gave Odee a gentle nuzzle.

Donkey Odee blushed. “Why are you way out here?”

“I wondered what it was like to be a wild pony. It seemed like fun. The rat snake told me it was exciting and I should go find them. He said the ponies wanted me to join them, but they just wanted to trap me.”

“Hmmm, come on there’s something I have to do.”

Penelope followed Donkey Odie to the large oak tree where Bessie and Bossie were still chewing away.

Donkey Odie spotted the rat snake still stretched out and sleeping on the limb then stood on his hind legs and grabbed the branch in his teeth then pulled it as close to the ground as he could.

“Hey, wha’ssss going on?” the rat snake hissed.

“Mbye mbye.” Donkey Odie said through clenched teeth.

Then he let go of the limb and the rat snake screamed, “Ieeeeahhh...”, as he tumbled, tongue over tail, high into the air and clear into the next county.


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Jan Ackerson 06/08/07
Donkey Odee! Don Quixote! I love it! My dad used to have a petting zoo, and he had a donkey named Donkey Hodey, so I picked up on this right away. I love children's stories that toss a little something to the adults reading them.
Joanne Sher 06/08/07
Fun - and good lesson for kids at their level. Nice.
Sharlyn Guthrie06/11/07
Cute story. I like how you portrayed the snake, and every child would applaud the ending, for sure!
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/12/07
Children love animal stories and hero stories. You combines those features excellently. The imagery is great.
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/12/07
sorry--"combined" The challenge was to write for a child--not like one!
Marilee Alvey06/16/07
This was a delightful story, replete with Satan, angels and Donkey Odee who, in his own strength, is simply laughable. This was a good story to show us what we can do, standing up for what is right in our own pastures, with God at our side. Very well done and deserving of recognition!