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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write something suitable for CHILDREN (05/31/07)

TITLE: The McGreedy Family


The McGreedys

In every city and town there are quirky, trendy and greedy people, people like the McGreedys. They are a peculiar type of human species. Once you’ve read this story, you might agree.

The McGreedy family consists of: Harold, the father, Hazel the mother, Henry their son and Harriett, their daughter.

The McGreedys live in a big, fancy home and have two beautiful cars, both brand new and methodically cleaned and waxed once a month. The new cars take them only to important places and important people. You see, this family loves and lives for just for themselves! They work and play only so others will notice them and say, “Wow, aren’t they a rich, handsome and wonderful!”

The McGreedy family has many toys and trendy appliances in their huge ten bedroom home. They love to buy and own “things.” Harold, the father, has many television sets in his home. He’s often fond of saying, “No son or daughter of mine will be without a television set.”

Hazel, the mother, has many diamond rings and fur coats that she loves to show off, especially when the family goes visiting.

Harriett, the coy daughter, has dozens of dresses and sweaters and Henry has five bicycles…blue, red, yellow, green and white. (Henry often mutters to himself, “You just never know when you might need an extra bike.”)

This family doesn’t have many friends and they can’t understand why. (Do you think there might be a good reason why no one wants to be his or her friend?)

They dress beautifully in all the newest fashions. They’re very smart, or so they think. They often trek to their local library; although they rarely go there to read; they go there to see and be seen.

Often at night, at the dinner table one of them might say, “I wonder why no one comes to visit us? We’re a rich family and besides we have so many new things!”

The McGreedys have only one family on their block that likes them. This family that likes them so much is the Shellfish Selfish Family. They like each other because they have so much in common. The Selfish Family comes to visit the McGreedys about twice a month. Both families have great fun when they’re together and talk about how sad it is that everyone isn’t as wonderful, smart and rich as they are.

The McGreedys and the Selfish families, like other families you might know, live a blissfully happy life until, life drops a problem into their lap. Whenever the Shellfish Selfish and McGreedy families get sick, get bad grades, have to fix an ailing car, or are told that they are being pests, they get angry, cry and often have terrible, loud temper tantrums.

Often, they begin blaming all of their worries and problems on others. It doesn’t take much to put them in a whirling tailspin. Why they get angry if someone on their block wears new clothes or buys a DVD that they don’t have.

As the McGreedy family gets older, they find themselves all alone. No one wants to be with them for they have let their greed and selfishness take over everything in their lives. As they get older they all just sit around and talk about their cars, jewelry, coats and cash. They make fun of others and blame strangers for their problems.

You see, if a family stays greedy and selfish all their lives, they end up bitter, and all alone. Money, toys and such are nice. We all like them and want them but all these things will eventually rust, decay, get lost or be given away. What really lasts are friendship and family.

People like the McGreedys come and go, just like the money that they spend.

It is important, you might ponder, to put your love, trust and happiness in a higher power and those you love, instead of things. You will soon find that people are far more loving and precious than gold, silver and costs you nothing more than time and caring.

No one needs to end up alone and lonely, not even the McGreedy family. But, the McGreedys will end up alone because they never learn. It’s not too late for you and me.

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Dee Yoder 06/10/07
There's a huge moral in your story for modern families. A good story for older 'tweens-the age that starts to be concerned about what others have and what others think.
David Butler06/10/07
Very clever use of family names, and the title caught my attention. The word limit might have discouraged a bit of dialogue, but if you ever write an expanded form of this, maybe more dialogue could enhance it?
Rita Garcia06/11/07
Love the names of the McGreedy's, fantastic and well written!