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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write something suitable for CHILDREN (05/31/07)

TITLE: Such a Scare
By Sally Hanan


Momma said, “It’s time for bed.
Daddy called me Sleepyhead.
How could they think that I was fried, when all I did was rub my eyes?

I kept on playing with my stuff,
pretending they weren’t loud enough,
but when I peeked at Mom of doom, her finger pointed to my room.

“It’s so not fair, I built for hours!
Look at all my Lego towers!
Why should I just go away while baby Matt stays up to play?”

I turned around, lay on the floor,
but Mom still pointed to my door.
Tears were coursing down my face, howling, begging for some grace.

Momma looked sideways at Dad;
rolled her eyes like she was mad.
Daddy got up off his chair … really gave me quite a scare.

“I’m going, going, see me run!
I promise you I’ll soon be done.”
I ran upstairs and brushed my teeth, and for good measure -- washed my feet.

I washed my hands and combed my hair,
grabbed my PJs, said a prayer,
“Dear Jesus, help my dad be nice; I don’t want him to scare me twice.”

I heard a laugh behind my door.
Dad was not mad anymore!
He fought me in our tickling match and then gave me a long back scratch.

He told me not to give Mom grief,
that she was tired and needed sleep.
He said he loved me even though I tried to put on such a show.

Mom came up, sat on my bed,
then looked at me and sighed and said,
“Why did you kick up such a fuss instead of just obeying us?”

Then the fake tears started over;
as I wailed to try persuade her;
'til Dad yelled up, “NOT A PEEP!” So I shut up ... and went ... to sleep.

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Dee Yoder 06/07/07
Any parent can relate and any youngster will like to read this! Cute and soooo true.
Pat Guy 06/07/07
THIS-is--so-good! It's perfect! And I can see myself reading this to my kids! Yep - it's good, it's good!
Joanne Sher 06/08/07
So cute - great perspective and SO genuine! Fun stuff!
Rita Garcia06/11/07
This brought back lots of precious memories of when our children were small. Love it!
"and for good measure -- washed my feet." Love IT!

Jan Ackerson 06/11/07
I hadn't read many entries this week, because I'm so past kiddie lit in my own life, but pieces like this one make me glad I've read the hints. It's just so very, very good. Perfection.
Beth LaBuff 06/11/07
I had a kid just like this!! It was fun to read. :)
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/12/07
This was a super-delightful children's story that kids will love. I loved it, too--guess I still have lots of kid left in me !
I remember my kids acting that way and acting that way myself.
Kristen Hester06/13/07
Did you study my children for your story? Bedtime can be a real challenge at our house. Towers of Legos is so familiar. I loved it because it was so truthful. It was fun also. Thanks!
Janice Fitzpatrick06/13/07
HA! I had to laugh because our 6 yr old daughter, though she has the face of a little angel with big blue eyes and pink cherub cheeks is quite the little drama queen. The daily events of going to bed or eating her meal has often been a battle that would put David, of the Bible to the test.:0)LOL. I like the flow of rhythym and how the dad backed mom up. Bravo! Nice job! Janice
Sara Harricharan 06/14/07
LOL! I know quite a few little kids who have that same 'show' every night. I can't help saying "Cute and Fun" The ryhme was good, was 'fried' on purpose or a typo? Otheriwse, I liked it. The character of Dad is just wonderful.