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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write something suitable for CHILDREN (05/31/07)

TITLE: Timmy's a dork..
By Jesus Puppy
06/05/07


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Timmy's a dork..

Dear Diary: Timmy Jensen is such a dork. He keeps bugging me every week about the stuff he learns at church. Doesn't he know he is an idiot for believing in all that God stuff? Why can't he just leave me alone?

There was a new girl started school today, her name is Milly and she is already 12, but we get alone great. She likes the same clothes and agrees with me that Timmy's a dork.

Dear Diary: I spent the whole day shopping with Milly and her mom. Though her mom is a nervous type, she is really nice and didn't even get mad when we ran off in the Mall. I knew Milly was the coolest, we spent almost an hour in the music section, she knows all the top stuff. I just know we will be the best of friends.

I asked if Milly could stay over for a night, but her mom said they would have to talk to my parents about it first. She probably thinks no one will be there but us. Who knows with parents?

Dear Diary: Milly gets to come over this weekend, it will be so cool. Mom even said we can order Pizza and pick up a few movies. Too bad Sis is still away at school, she would love Milly and we'd have a lot of fun. I can't wait 'til summer, I know Sis will take us to the lake.

Dear Diary: Horror of horrors, When Milly stayed over She told me her mom knows the Jensens, and even agreed to go to their church sometime. I warned her to be careful. That Timmy will try having her brainwashed.

We spent all day goofing off then picked up a movie. Too cool, Milly likes dark movies too, we got both the UnderWorld movies. They were ok, except for the love scenes. Yuck.

Dear diary: Birthday, Birthday. . . one more year to teen hood. Though I didn't tell her what I wanted, Milly brought me the coolest shirt. Mom made me invite that dorky Timmy Jenson, but it was a good party anyway. Milly made it great, she is my best friend forever.

Dear Diary: I think something is wrong will Milly. She seems ok, but keeps talking about some friend she met at Jensen's church. Though she still says Timmy is a dork, and said that some of the other kids there say the same, she did say she understands him a little better.

She said she's fine and that she didn't get brainwashed, but I saw that she now brings one of those little bible books to school with her. Maybe it is just to please her mom, but I'm still worried.

Dear Diary: I am going to get to the bottom of what ever is wrong with Milly. She keeps going on about how great this NEW friend of her's is, and now she finally asked me to join her at this church thing to meet him. Now is my chance to free her from these brain washers. I will get my best friend back if it is the last thing I do.

Dear Diary: I am so ashamed, my life has always seemed to be good, but I understand now that it is nothing. I went with Milly to her church and learned of her friend. He is not only a friend but a true hero, more than that even as He made everything for us and even died for us. All my life I thought I did what was right, how could I be so wrong. Thank you Jesus, for showing me the truth, and thank You for bringing me Milly.

I now have an even better friend in Milly, now we are sisters, and we can be together forever.

P.S. Sorry Lord, but I still think Timmy's a dork.


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Ed VanDeMark06/07/07
Timmy's a dork...good story. To be sure even devout Christians can be dorks, but at age 16 he may make the transition from dork to cool. You understand the 12 year old mind set. Good job.
Sara Harricharan 06/07/07
Really great! ^_^ The title's a keeper and so is the story.
Joanne Sher 06/07/07
Love the title ;) - and the last line. Your voice is right on. This certainly felt genuine and realistic.
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/08/07
A story well told with a little girl's voice in her diary. I liked the way the message was brought out and the note of humor at the end.
Rita Garcia06/11/07
WONDERFUL, FANTASTIC and I LOVE IT!
Jan Ackerson 06/11/07
I wouldn't re-visit my girls' preteen years for anything! It's such a horrid time of life, and you've captured all of it very well.
Kristen Hester06/13/07
What a sweet way to share a testimony. Very nice.
Janice Fitzpatrick06/14/07
This really does have a realistic voice of a 12 yr old girl. Very nicely done! God bless.Keep it up-I enjoyed ths alot.I think young christian and non christian girls would enjoy this.Janice
David Butler 06/14/07
I heartily agree with all the above. The narrative can be such a powerful tool to communicate truth. Liked this a lot. It's so good, I won't even bother to comment about the typos, (which nobody does on mine.) ;)
Teri Wilson06/14/07
This was really cute and realistic for a pre-teen girl. I love the ending, especially the PS.
Esther Gellert06/14/07
This was great and I agree with everything everybody else has said.
Catrina Bradley 06/14/07
Fabulous! You really got the voice of a 12-yo, I think. I was truly pulled into this, and got misty at the last entry even tho I expected it might be coming. The last line was perfect. And it stopped the tears. :)