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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write something suitable for CHILDREN (05/31/07)

TITLE: Granny 911
By Val Clark
06/05/07


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To: Gran911@yahoo.com.au
From: Sharon95@yahoo.com
Subject: Miss you

Dear Gran,
Thanks so much for posting me as soon as you got email. Iím so lonely. Mum and Dad are busy all the time with work. New York is so loud and in your face. I really miss home. And you. And Miffy. I so wish theyíd let me stay with you. Love Sharon. BTW if you press F7 on your keyboard the computer will do a spell and grammar check for you. PS Gran911. Cool. My very own Emergency Gran!


To: Sharon95@yahoo.com
From: Gran911@yahoo.com.au
Subject: Miss you too

My Darling Sharon,

Thank you so much for the tip about the spell check. Iím on a steep learning curve here, just as you are in NY.

The library staff is very helpful but it took me ages to work out what BTW might mean and then another age to find F7.

You didnít answer my question about school? How are you settling in?

I take Miffy for a walk along the beach every morning. With our arthritis she and I make a pair.

I wonít bore you with the minutiae of my life except to say that you are always in my prayers. And although we are half a world away from each other we are less than an instant away from the Lord.

Love Gran


To: Gran911@yahoo.com.au
From: Sharon95@yahoo.com
Subject: Miffy

Dear Gran, please borrow Uncle Jakeís digital camera and send me some pictures of Miffy. Love Sharon.


To: Sharon95@yahoo.com
From: Gran911@yahoo.com.au
Subject: School!

Dear Sharon,

Jake is coming for a walk with us tomorrow and will take pictures.

Now, tell me what is wrong with school. And donít drivel on about the classes and the accent. Something is wrong and I need to know so that I can pray for you.

Love Gran


To: Gran911@yahoo.com.au
From: Sharon95@yahoo.com
Subject: School!

Oh, Gran, promise me you wont tell mum and dad. Thereís this awful girl in my class and her big Ė I mean BIG Ė sister is in the next grade. I tried ignoring her comments about my accent and the Ďfriendlyí pinch when she walks by and the way she knocks my elbow in art or pushes my stuff off the desk but it doesnít make any difference. Yesterday and today they cornered me and upended my bag and stole my lunch money and the key teddy you gave me and then after school they followed me home.


To: Sharon95@yahoo.com
From: Gran911@yahoo.com.au
Subject: Promises
Attachment: Miffy jpg. 1 Miffy jpg. 2 Miffy jpg. 3

Darling Sharon,

Here are some of the photos, as promised.

Sharon, dear heart. You must tell your mum and dad about the situation at school. I honestly can not promise to keep silent about this. No matter what they threaten you with they are bullies and bullies are cowards. They are picking on someone who is isolated and who does not know how the school system works. For your sake and the sake of other children in the school they must be stopped.

Promise me two things. First that you will pray for these girls. Pray for wisdom and the power to forgive them. Secondly tell your mum and dad. Iíll be calling later tomorrow night. That gives you twenty four hours. If you donít tell them, I will. I love you too much to let you get hurt. This is bigger than just here and now. I donít want you to grow up as a victim. You must learn to face the things you fear.

Love Gran.

To: Gran911@yahoo.com.au
From: Sharon95@yahoo.com
Subject: School!

Please Gran, please donít tell.

To: Gran911@yahoo.com.au
From: Sharon95@yahoo.com
Subject: School!

I hate you! I donít ever want to talk to you again. Ever.

To: Sharon95@yahoo.com
From: Gran911@yahoo.com.au
Subject: Miffy
Attachment: Miffy jpg. 4 Miffy jpg. 5 Miffy jpg. 6

Dearest Sharon,

Never forget, Jesus loves you.

Love Gran

To: Gran911@yahoo.com.au
From: rodnel@yahoo.com
Subject: Sharon

Hi Mum,
As you can imagine Sharon is devastated by your perceived betrayal of her. One minute sheís a vulnerable child and the next she thinks she can conquer the world alone. She can be so strong willed! I know thatís not a bad thing in a kid, she just has to learn what to be stubborn about. *sigh*

Anyway, Mum, Rod and I have transferred money into your account so that you can come and visit us. We think that will be the only way to resolve this with Sharon. Jake has said heíll take Miffy.

Love Eleanor


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Dee Yoder 06/07/07
I think this is a wonderful beginning of a book for 'tweens. I enjoyed the format and it's relevant to an 11-13 year old's environment. I hope you plan to write the rest of the story!
Seema Bagai 06/08/07
Liked the format of telling the story in e-mails.
Joanne Sher 06/08/07
I enjoyed the email format - but I need MORE! I agree, this is a great start, and I hope you are going to finish it outside the challenge.
Sharon Henderson06/08/07
Loved it. I felt for everyone involved. In printed form if something could set apart each writer, perhaps a different font or something, it might read a tad easier. Keep going and finish the story! :-)
Mo 06/10/07
I like the format. If you expand it, maybe add the date to the e-mail, too? (If you have a bigger word count.) Nice job, the voices sound real!
Janice Fitzpatrick06/11/07
Good job. I like the email format for an idea,imaginative and the written conversation between adolescent and grandma is delightful and very realistic.I'm waiting for more to come. You have to write a second chapter on this. It would make a great preteen to early teen book for girls.God bless,Janice
Kristen Hester06/12/07
Very nice. I love the gran's email address! Too funny. The voices were so authentic. The girl talked like a girl, the gran a gran and the mother a mother. Great job. I want to know what happens! I have so many questions!
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/12/07
I enjoyed this vey much and would love to read more. What a lesson is here for a child who's facing a bully. The story needs to be finished!
David Butler 08/25/07
What a great and very moving story! And what an imaginative format! Won't forget this one too quickly.
This would start a debate, I'm sure, about Gran's wisdom in informing the parents or not. Some would say she should have given as much counsel as she could without "betraying confidences" and prayed hard. Others may maintain she was right to break confidence in this case, especially if the bullies became violent. Only God knows for sure. Miss your writing, Val.