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06/07/07
This is so sweet...love it. My favorite were the last two lines. Excellent writing.
06/08/07
Very well written. An authentic child's voice. Well done.
06/09/07
How lovely. I didn't expect the voice of God replying and that was awesome. I like how you wrote simply from a child's heart and emotion. Very well done! Keep it up. This is touching, I can relate to it well being young once and tenderhearted. I sometimes this in my own little six year old whose soft heart gets broken easily. Thx for sharing this. Beautiful. Janice
06/09/07

Great story...I could really feel her pain. I loved God's answer. I especially liked it when she learned who took her cookie.

I think you're missing some quotation marks at the end of several lines...good work...dave
06/09/07
This was cute and it might work in a Chriatian magazine for young kids if you add descriptive writing to it too rather than just have dialogue. Alternatively, you could turn it into a script for Sunday School classrooms.
06/11/07
I love the way Katie tells God exactly who she is! Perfect from beginning to end!
06/12/07
Wonderful job with God's "voice" and the way her spoke to this precious little girl on her level.

There were a few points where I thought she was a bit too articulate for a first-grader, but nothing major. The main idea--that God hears and responds to our prayers--is loud and clear, and very precious.
06/12/07
This is precious and wonderful. Your voice is just right for your child AND her Father - I am certain this is exactly how God talks to the little ones. I love the ending especially.
06/13/07
Aww, that made me teary-eyed. I like the conversation a lot. I think both children and adults would gain something from this story.
06/13/07
I enjoyed the story very much--loved how the little girl identified herself and her location to God "just in case." Her problems that she shared with God were certainly significant to her. I believe it is important for children (and grown-ups) to know that everything that concerns us matters to God.
06/13/07
This is so sweet. My first grader is dyslexic so she has had similar feelings as your character. What an encouraging story.
06/13/07
This should get children's attention. Very good pov and done in a delightful manner.
06/13/07
This is very sweet. I could picture the little girl in her bed, talking to God. Great job.
06/14/07
This is one of my favorites for this week! I love the title and the story. The 'reply' was my favorite part, especially the second to last paragraph with the cookie culprit. very sweet. Kudos to you! ^_^