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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Write something suitable for CHILDREN (05/31/07)

TITLE: Made By God
By Terry R A Eissfeldt
06/04/07


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Verse One

Long ago the earth was black
Then God spoke, “Light!” and that was that
Day was born and so was night
God was happy with the sight

He put the sky into its place
Water over and under the space
Evening came and morning too
God look out and said, “It’s good!”

Next came oceans and the land
Trees and bushes, lots of plants
Everything was green and bright
God was happy with the sight

Lights were made for day and night
The sun and moon and stars so bright
He laughed and named each one with love
God was pleased and said, “It’s good!”

He filled the waters and the sky
With swimming fishes and birds that fly
He blessed them all with pure delight
God was happy with the sight

Next the earth was filled with life
Animals of every kind
He then made man with special love
God was pleased and said, “It’s good!”

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Verse Two

Angelfish and Barracudas,
Giant Clams and Daddy Longlegs,
Eagles soaring high above,
Each one shows me God is love.

Furry Foxes, gaggling Geese,
Happy Horses, Impalas free,
Jack fish swimming in the sea,
Singing love songs just for me.

Koalas cuddle, Llamas climb,
Macaws mimic, narwhals swim,
Owls sit wisely in the trees,
Each created just to be.

Playful porpoise, quizzical quail,
Running rabbit, slow moving snail,
Tiger slinking in the night,
Point to God and all His might.

Umbrella birds, voles and wrens,
Ancient armored Xenarthrans*,
Youyous, Yaks and zebras too,
Made by God for me and you.

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*Xenarthran- the family that includes anteaters and armadillos


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Verna Cole Mitchell 06/08/07
I like this very much. The first verse would be a good way for children to learn the order of creation. The alliteration in the second verse as well as repetition in the first make it a good read-aloud poem.
Jan Ackerson 06/11/07
My favorite is verse two, as I'm a lover of word play. Wonderful!

Take a look at the 4th line of the 2nd stanza for a quick fix if you submit this elsewhere.

I'd love to see that 2nd verse illustrated with rich, vibrant colors and crowds of animals.
Rita Garcia06/11/07
Fantstic! I love that you have embraced the message of God's creation, in a way that is perfect young minds.
Beth LaBuff 06/11/07
I like the thought "day was born" and I like the repeat of "It's good". It would be fun to see an illustration of the 2nd half of your poem with all the animals! I'm sure a child would enjoy looking at all the pictures while the poem is being red. The title is perfect.
Dee Yoder 06/12/07
This is really beautiful. It makes me imagine the Earth the way God originally created it and intended it to be. Very colorful images!
Joanne Sher 06/12/07
Oh, I just LOVE the second section especially! I can see that illustrated just beautifully, maybe even as an alphabet book. Just lovely, fun and delightful.
David Butler 06/12/07
I agree with comments above. This would be a great illustrated book, where kids get an appreciation of the not-so-common as well as well-known animals. Your love for God's creation comes through loud and clear. Well done.
Kristen Hester 06/13/07
Children love poems. The second verse is so much fun with the animals in alphabetical order. Very creative.
Jacquelyn Horne06/13/07
Very readable for children.


   
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