The Official Writing Challenge
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06/08/07
Great voice - you definitely grabbed me. Great job on the audience too - this seems just right for the elementary set :)
06/08/07
Interesting story! I liked Mandie's bravery and her desire to help her brother. She has a great imagination! :)

I got a little confused in the middle, because it didn't say they ran home to get their "props" and set things up to scare the guys in the cave. I wasn't sure at first if someone else was there, too, trying to get the boys to come out.

I like how things worked out in the end! Good job! :)
06/11/07
I love it when younger kids get the better of older kids--this was great!
06/11/07
Gotta love, Mandy! Great story!
06/12/07
Excellent story, well written, with believable characters and a message that worked just right.
06/13/07
My 10 year old would love this story. If she wasn't at her Mimi's house I would have her it. The kids are very believable. Good job!
06/13/07
This is really good. The only thing that confused me was how they got all those "props" there so quickly without going back home. I guess word count makes us "speed" up. But this was a very good story for children.