The Official Writing Challenge
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06/09/07
Vivdly written. Nice detail. This is so cute. God bless your writing. Janice:0)
06/10/07
Cute story! I really liked the beginning with its various sounds--"Jonathan Calf was bored. He was tired of waiting. He stamped his foot impatiently. He shook his head so the big bell around his neck rang. He swished his tail so it hit each side of his stall.

“Stamp! Clang! Wham!” said his hoof and bell and tail."

I rhink kids would like that, too! :) Good job!

06/10/07
I enjoyed the way you stroked all this senses in the wonderful story!